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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 3
Grocery from superstores and online has emerged as new trends. Although a large number of people like to buy online, still there are people who love traditional methods of shopping especially for edible products. This essay will discuss both sides and also tell why my opinion stand with online shopping. Food is the most important need of man as it is related to health and no one wants to compromise with quality. Supermarket is popular among because people can select good quality of food from large amount. For example, most of Indian females are very choosy about their kitchen products, they test vegetables and fruit by touching and smelling them. Moreover, these markets provide them pleasure of satisfaction with a variety of food. Therefore, they do not want to leave this mode of shopping. Another side of the coin shows that in recent days internet also has dominated food industry. The most prominent reason behind this is it's time saving feature. As people order food online from home or workplace, they receive it very quickly in their place. So there is no bondage of place too, As researches show that 90% youngster preferring online sites rather than spending too much time in huge stores. Additionally, these sites are providing free home deliveries to grab more and more consumers. Therefore online shopping has become a latest trend. In conclusion, it can be said that big stores and online shopping has made buyers life easy. This essay has discussed how supermarket has provided variety and personal touch in shopping and how online shopping is faster and convenient. In my opinion, despite of the supermarket, people still shifting to online shopping because it is time and money saving.
Grocery from superstores and
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online
has emerged as new trends. Although
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a large number of
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people
like to
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buy
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online
,
still
there are
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people
who
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love
traditional methods of
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shopping
especially
for edible products. This essay will discuss both sides and
also
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tell
why my opinion stand with
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online
shopping.

Food is the most
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important
need of
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man
as it
is related
to health and no one wants to compromise with quality. Supermarket is popular among
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because
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people
can select
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good
quality of
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food
from large amount.
For example
, most of Indian females are
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very
choosy about their kitchen products, they
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test
vegetables and fruit by touching and smelling them.
Moreover
, these markets provide them pleasure of satisfaction with a variety of
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food
.
Therefore
, they do not want to
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leave
this mode of shopping.

Another side of the coin
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shows
that in recent
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days
internet
also
has dominated
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food
industry. The most prominent reason behind this is
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it's
time saving feature. As
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people
order
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food
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online
from home or workplace, they receive it
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very
quickly
in their place.
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So
there is no bondage of place too, As researches
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show
that 90% youngster preferring
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online
sites
rather
than spending too much time in huge stores.
Additionally
, these sites are providing free home deliveries to grab more and more consumers.
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Therefore
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online
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shopping
has become
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a
latest trend.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that
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big
stores and
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online
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shopping
has made buyers life easy. This essay has discussed how supermarket has provided variety and personal touch in
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shopping
and how
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online
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shopping
is faster and convenient. In my opinion,
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despite of
the supermarket,
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people
still
shifting to
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online
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shopping
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because
it is time and money saving.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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