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Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree v.2

Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. v. 2
Foods are called medicines in the ancient times. A few people believe that government should enhance the taxes to woo the people to begin taking the healthy meal. I encourage this activity if implemented by the authority. However, I do encourage some extents going for junk foods. This essay will discuss my support in both cases with some details. In Tamil, we equate foodstuff to medicine. If you practice healthy and hygienic cuisine habits, you can get rid of thousand diseases. For instance papaya is meant for tropical and some extent temperate weather. If you consume at cold weather, you may end of upsetting stomach (dysentery) due to body heating nature of papaya. So you should aware of what kind of foodstuff you are consuming. The second example is a peanut. It is one of the common diet in Asian countries. But it is allergenic to North Americans. Hence to lead a healthy activity you should have the best knowledge of what you are eating. Nevertheless, having an unhealthy meal is not a bad idea. It is relatively tastier and gives happiness to the people. Happiness stimulates endomorphine in the brain. The hormones reduce the stress. So it depends how much you take this kind of meal. Overdose is harmful to your well being. Moreover unhealthy foods are easy to cook because most of the unhealthy foods are fast foods. People who live in this fast phase of life have no choice have to go for fast foods. But have to limit their intake as it screw up your life in the wrong run. In conclusion, I would encourage ministry to provide subsidies for those feeding healthy fare. But it does not mean that government should concentrate completely on eradicating unhealthy foods such as fast food, can food, and frozen meal because we need some time to save time due to our busy life schedule.
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are called
medicines in the ancient times. A few
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people
believe that
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government
should enhance the taxes to woo the
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people
to
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begin
taking the
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healthy
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meal
. I encourage this activity if implemented by the authority.
However
, I do encourage
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some
extents going for junk
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foods
. This essay will discuss my support in both cases with
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some
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details
.

In Tamil, we equate foodstuff to medicine. If you practice
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healthy
and hygienic cuisine habits, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of thousand diseases.
For instance
papaya
is meant
for tropical and
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some
extent temperate weather. If you consume at
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cold
weather, you may
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end
of upsetting stomach (dysentery) due to body heating nature of papaya.
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So
you
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should aware
of what kind of foodstuff you are consuming. The second example is a peanut. It is one of the common diet in Asian countries.
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But
it is allergenic to North Americans.
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Hence
to lead a
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healthy
activity you should have the best knowledge of what you are eating.

Nevertheless
, having an
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unhealthy
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meal
is not a
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bad
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idea
. It is
relatively
tastier and gives happiness to the
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people
. Happiness stimulates
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endomorphine
in the brain. The hormones
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reduce
the
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stress
.
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it
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depends
how much you take this kind of
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meal
. Overdose is harmful to your
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well being
.
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Moreover
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unhealthy
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foods
are easy to cook
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because
most of the
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unhealthy
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foods
are
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fast
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foods
.
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who
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live
in this
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fast
phase of life have no choice
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have to
go for
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fast
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foods
.
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But
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have to
limit their intake as it screw up your life in the
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wrong
run.

In conclusion
, I would encourage ministry to provide subsidies for those feeding
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healthy
fare.
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But
it does not mean that
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government
should concentrate completely on eradicating
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unhealthy
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foods
such as
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fast
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food
, can
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food
, and frozen
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meal
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because
we need
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some
time to save time due to our busy life schedule.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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