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Some people think that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people think that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. v. 1
Some people hold the view that increasing taxes on unhealthy products can encourage people to lead a healthy lifestyle. I partly agree with this argument as I believe that other measures should also be implemented. Implementing higher prices on junk food can certainly be a good measure for combating unhealthy practices. Most fast food costs relatively cheap, and this is one of the key factors of its prevalence. If the price of such food is increased, people would be less willing to buy it and businesses would need to take measures for improving a situation with the decreasing money flow. They might start producing healthier food if they do not want to lose their business. This eventually can influence people's health. Another effective measure would be to educate people about unhealthy food. This is especially important for young people as they are less aware of health problems that might cause eating unhealthy food. The first measure could be for schools to educate youngsters by giving them a lecture on a healthy lifestyle. In addition to this, television should broadcast programs about healthy practices. This can include lectures about the ingredients of different food products and other aspects of a healthy life. In conclusion, although imposing higher taxes on unhealthy food can be a good measure to prevent people from buying it, I think that education can be not less important.
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Some
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hold the view that increasing taxes on
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unhealthy
products can encourage
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people
to lead a
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healthy
lifestyle. I partly
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agree
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measures
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good
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measure
for combating
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unhealthy
practices. Most
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fast
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food
costs
relatively
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cheap
, and this is one of the key factors of its prevalence. If the price of such
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food
is increased
,
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people
would be less willing to
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buy
it and businesses would need to take
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measures
for improving a situation with the decreasing money flow. They might
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start
producing healthier
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food
if they do not want to lose their business. This
eventually
can influence
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people
's health.

Another effective
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measure
would be to educate
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people
about
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unhealthy
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food
. This is
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for young
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people
as they are less aware of health problems that might cause eating
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unhealthy
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food
. The
first
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measure
could be for schools to educate youngsters by giving them a lecture on a
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healthy
lifestyle.
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to this, television should broadcast programs about
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healthy
practices. This can include lectures about the ingredients of
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food
products and other aspects of a
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healthy
life.

In conclusion
, although imposing higher taxes on
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unhealthy
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food
can be a
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good
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measure
to
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prevent
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people
from buying it, I
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think
that education can be not less
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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