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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.15

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 15
The exploitation of animals is debatable. A good strength of humans believes that animals should not be exploited and the other side suggests they are needed to satisfy various needs of humans. This essay will discuss both the sides of the argument and will put forward the evidence for exploiting the animals. Some set of people argues that humans need support from animals for various reasons. It is believed that, human survival is the most important thing in this world. When compared with humans, animals are less painful. Although they add beauty to nation, but more than that, the survival of the human is essential. They provide good strength to the humans, thereby increasing their resistance towards diseases. New research, will lead to the invention of a new drug, which is most likely to be tested on the animal’s body. Human life is more valuable when compared to animals, as even in the failure of those drugs it will affect anyone, expect diversity. As an illustration, in 2003, a new cancer drug was invented and they were injected into mouse, which was most probably to show positive results, and finally it landed on the other side. However, if this was injected in humans, then we would have seen a dramatic tragedy. On the other hand, the majority of the population believes that, humans and animals must be treated with the same rights. Many protests against using animals for the benefits of humans. They argue that all the vitamins and minerals that are provided by animal species, are present in vegetables and fruits. The brain functions faster, if consumption of meat is reduced. By, declining the use of meat as a food will also make a person more intelligent. The rate of exploitation of animals, would come down if eatery purpose is reduced. To conclude, although quite a lot of people argue for equal rights for both animals and humans, testing of research on animals has less effect when compared to humans. So, furthermore, animals should satisfy the needs of humans, as the existence of human in this world is considered to be the one with more priority.
The exploitation of
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animals
is debatable. A
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good
strength of
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humans
believes that
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animals
should not
be exploited
and the other side suggests they
are needed
to satisfy various needs of
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humans
. This essay will discuss both the sides of the argument and will put forward the evidence for exploiting the animals.

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Some
set of
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people
argues that
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humans
need support from
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animals
for various reasons. It
is believed
that,
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human
survival is the most
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important
thing in this world. When compared with
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humans
,
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animals
are less painful. Although they
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add
beauty to nation,
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but
more than that, the survival of the
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human
is essential. They provide
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good
strength to the
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humans
, thereby increasing their resistance towards diseases. New research, will lead to the invention of a new drug, which is most likely to be
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tested
on the
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animal’s
body.
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Human
life is more valuable when compared to
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animals
, as even in the failure of those drugs it will affect anyone,
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expect
diversity. As an illustration, in 2003, a new cancer drug was
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invented and
they
were injected
into mouse, which was most
probably
to
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show
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positive
results, and
finally
it landed on the other side.
However
, if this
was injected
in
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humans
, then we would have
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seen
a dramatic tragedy.

On the other hand
, the majority of the population believes that,
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humans
and
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animals
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must
be treated
with the same rights.
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Many
protests against using
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animals
for the benefits of
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humans
. They argue that all the vitamins and minerals that
are provided
by
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animal
species, are present in vegetables and fruits. The brain functions faster, if consumption of meat is
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reduced
. By, declining the
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use
of meat as a food will
also
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make
a person more intelligent. The rate of exploitation of
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animals
, would
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come
down if eatery purpose is
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reduced
.

To conclude
, although quite
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a lot of
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people
argue for equal rights for both
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animals
and
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humans
, testing of research on
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animals
has less effect when compared to
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humans
.
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So
,
furthermore
,
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animals
should satisfy the needs of
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humans
, as the existence of
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human
in this world
is considered
to be the one with more priority.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 15

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