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Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v.2

Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v. 2
In the modern era, thanks to the advent of technology, people enjoy a wide range of news sources including the internet, television, to name but a handful. In this regard, many believe that despite the abundance of news sources, the accuracy and transparency they provide are not satisfying. However, others have the conviction that media release is trustworthy and give them the required vision upon the world around. I personally subscribe to the view that information from the media is becoming inaccurate. I stand to this viewpoint for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay. To begin with, in most countries, the press is not independent of the predominant power, and the free press is somehow an illusion in this world. Unfortunately, despite the abundance of news sources, the information released from the media before going viral undergoes some changes in order to guarantee the profit of some specific political groups. In other words, the news is a slave to some biased policies. For instance, in my country Iran, the wildlife is in a real danger as so much as a considerable number of species are about to extinction. Nevertheless, the media rarely cover the crisis that threatens the rich natural habitat because some individuals, who have connections in the government administration have been accumulated so much wealth by exploiting the rich source of precious species. Accordingly, such a news only distributes by local people living nearby, which will not go viral due to the lack of audience. Therefore, if the press had been autonomous from political superpowers- which is not-, the world would have been a better place to live. Secondly, there are some website on the internet –for example, wikileaks. com - that make revelation some valid documents about some critical events in the past, which had played crucial roles in the specific period of some countries’ history. These revelations made a few decades after the events make people suspicious about the accuracy of current news. For instance, the effects of superpower countries in the destination of middle- east countries, or the true story behind some wars that took place in the past decades and have left many innocents murdered people. Moreover, regardless of the existence of such websites, most of the critical news released from different sources contradict each other, which leaves people confused and baffled. To put all into a nutshell, considering all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe that free press is just an illusion in the world today, and most of them just give a shadow of real stories. I feel this way inasmuch as not only are they slaves to some biased policies, which guarantee the advantages of some limited groups, but also some websites on the internet reveal documents of past events, which confirm the idea that what we get from the media is being vague.
In the modern era, thanks to the advent of technology,
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people
enjoy a wide range of
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news
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sources
including the internet, television, to name
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but
a handful. In this regard,
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many
believe that despite the abundance of
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news
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sources
, the accuracy and transparency they provide are not satisfying.
However
, others have the conviction that
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media
release is trustworthy and give them the required vision upon the
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world
around. I
personally
subscribe to the view that information from the
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media
is becoming inaccurate. I stand to this viewpoint for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.

To
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begin
with, in most
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countries
, the
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press
is not independent of the predominant power, and the free
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press
is somehow an illusion in this
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world
. Unfortunately, despite the abundance of
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news
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sources
, the information released from the
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media
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before
going viral undergoes
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some
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changes
in order to guarantee the profit of
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some
specific political groups.
In other words
, the
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news
is a slave to
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some
biased policies.
For instance
, in my
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country
Iran, the wildlife is in a real
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danger
as
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so
much as a considerable number of species are about to extinction.
Nevertheless
, the
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media
rarely cover the crisis that threatens the rich natural habitat
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because
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some
individuals, who have connections in the
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government
administration have
been accumulated
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so
much wealth by exploiting the rich
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source
of precious species.
Accordingly
, such a
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news
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only
distributes by local
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people
living nearby, which will not go viral due to the lack of audience.
Therefore
, if the
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press
had been autonomous from political superpowers- which is not-, the
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world
would have been a better place to
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live
.

Secondly
, there are
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some
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website
on the internet –
for example
,
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wikileaks
.
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com
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-
that
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make
revelation
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some
valid documents about
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some
critical
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events
in the past, which had played crucial roles in the specific period of
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some
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countries’
history. These revelations made a few decades after the
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events
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make
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people
suspicious about the accuracy of
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current
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news
.
For instance
, the effects of superpower
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countries
in the destination of middle- east
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countries
, or the true story behind
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some
wars that took place in the past decades and have
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left
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many
innocents murdered
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people
.
Moreover
, regardless of the existence of such websites, most of the critical
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news
released from
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different
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sources
contradict each other, which
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leaves
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people
confused and baffled.

To put all into a nutshell, considering all the aforementioned reasons, I
firmly
believe that free
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press
is
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just
an illusion in the
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world
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today
, and most of them
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just
give a shadow of real stories. I feel this way inasmuch as not
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only
are they slaves to
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some
biased policies, which guarantee the advantages of
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some
limited groups,
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but
also
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some
websites on the internet reveal documents of past
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events
, which confirm the
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idea
that what we
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get
from the
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media
is being vague.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the media including newspapers, televisions, radio, and internet sources are less concerned about the accuracy of news. They think the information from the media is becoming incorrect. Do you agree with this opinion or not and explain wh v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
478 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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