Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays, some university offer graduate students skills that assist to find employment, but some people believe the main function of university should be to access knowledge for its sake. What is your opinion? v.1

Nowadays, some university offer graduate students skills that assist to find employment, but some people believe the main function of university should be to access knowledge for its sake. What is your opinion? v. 1
As university education is the last stage before the starting of career, many people believe that it prepares students for employment only, but the fact is that it serves a lot many purposes. In this essay I shall discuss the various functions of a university. Universities provide specialised education in fields such as medical, engineering, commerce etc. They provide library facilities, which support the curriculum. They provide laboratory facilities for science and technology related subjects. They send students to factories and industries so that they get practical experience. This job-oriented training helps them to understand the working conditions and also gives them an idea about competition in the market. They also create job opportunities for the students by arranging campus interviews. On the other hand, universities also perform other functions which help the students in their personal life. They organise co-curricular activities such as cultural programmes, sports, debates, fairs etc. They gain many qualities such as self-confidence and positive attitude, which help them in their future life. Moreover, some people just go to university for gaining knowledge just out of interest for the subject. For example, a doctor may want to learn French language just for interest in the language. Furthermore, a university is a place to know more about the world because there are students from across the globe in a university. For many, who may never travel abroad, this may be a chance of a lifetime for them to broaden their horizons and know more about the different cultures of the world. For example, in LPU ( Lovely Professional University), there are 200 students from Malaysia, Korea and other parts of the world. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, universities do not simply prepare a person for employment, but also have many other functions.
As
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
education is the last stage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the starting of career,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that it prepares
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
for employment
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the fact is that it serves a lot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
purposes. In this essay I shall discuss the various functions of a university.

Universities provide
Possible spelling mistake. 'specialised' is British English.
specialised
education in fields such as medical, engineering, commerce etc. They provide library facilities, which support the curriculum. They provide laboratory facilities for science and technology related subjects.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to factories and industries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
practical experience. This job-oriented training
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to understand the working conditions and
also
gives them an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
about competition in the market. They
also
create job opportunities for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
by arranging campus interviews.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
also
perform
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
functions which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in their personal life. They
Possible spelling mistake. 'organise' is British English.
organise
co-curricular activities such as cultural
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
, sports, debates, fairs etc. They gain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
qualities such as self-confidence and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
attitude, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in their future life.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
go to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
for gaining knowledge
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
out of interest for the subject.
For example
, a doctor may want to learn French language
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for interest in the language.

Furthermore
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
is a place to know more about the world
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
from across the globe in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
. For
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
, who may never travel abroad, this may be a chance of a lifetime for them to broaden their horizons and know more about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures of the world.
For example
, in
Possible spelling mistake found.
LPU
Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis
(
Lovely Professional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University)
, there are 200
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
from Malaysia, Korea and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
parts of the world.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
do not
simply
prepare a person for employment,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
functions.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, some university offer graduate students skills that assist to find employment, but some people believe the main function of university should be to access knowledge for its sake. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts