AN increasing number of people are buying what the need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v.1
AN increasing number of people are buying what the need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 1
It has always been the case that in certain ways our lives are intertwined with the lives of others. However, in the modern era, some people believe that dependency among people has increased, whereas others believe that people have grown to be more independent.
One reason that people think we are more dependent on each other is because of our reliance on others to provide a positive image of ourselves. People are bombarded these days with pictures of beautiful models and people who seem to have perfect lives. Many people therefore feel the need to go on social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, in order to post pictures and they need others to get as many ‘likes’ as possible. In addition to this, because of the hectic and busy lives some families lead, it is argued they are dependent on others to support them, such as with grandparents helping to take care of their grandchildren because the parents don't have time.
However, despite this, overall I believe that people are generally more independent. This can be seen in the way that so many people live away from their families and lead their own lives. For example, families used to live nearby to each other, but nowadays people often reside in different cities to their parents and siblings or in other countries, seeing each other only rarely in some cases. Not only this, people prefer more privacy than in the past and do not require help from others, seen in the way that neighbours these days often do not know each other or interact at all.
In conclusion, although in certain ways people are more dependent, it is generally the case that people now live more independent lives. Only over time will it be revealed as to whether this is a positive or negative development for society.
It has always been the case that in certain
ways
our
lives
are intertwined
with the
lives
of others.
However
, in the modern era,
some
people
believe that dependency among
people
has increased, whereas others believe that
people
have grown to be more independent.
One reason that
people
think
we are more dependent on each
other
is
because
of our reliance on others to provide a
positive
image of ourselves.
People
are bombarded
these days with pictures of
beautiful
models and
people
who seem to have perfect
lives
.
Many
people
therefore
feel the need to go on social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, in order to post
pictures and
they need others to
get
as
many
‘likes’ as possible.
In addition
to this,
because
of the hectic and busy
lives
some
families lead, it
is argued
they are dependent on others to support them, such as with grandparents helping to take care of their grandchildren
because
the parents don't have time.
However
, despite this,
overall
I believe that
people
are
generally
more independent. This can be
seen
in the
way
that
so
many
people
live
away from their families and lead their
own
lives
.
For example
, families
used
to
live
nearby to each
other
,
but
nowadays
people
often
reside in
different
cities to their parents and siblings or in
other
countries, seeing each
other
only
rarely in
some
cases. Not
only
this,
people
prefer more privacy than in the past and do not require
help
from others,
seen
in the
way
that
neighbours
these days
often
do not know each
other
or interact at all.
In conclusion
, although in certain
ways
people
are more dependent, it is
generally
the case that
people
now
live
more independent
lives
.
Only
over time will it
be revealed
as to whether
this is a
positive
or
negative
development for society.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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