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Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion. v.2

Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion. v. 2
university not only benefit student by providing a quality education but also the community where it establishes. All the prospect have a both constructive and destructive facets; however, to examine which one is more dominant determine its applicability. Similarly, university may help some location with greater positive impact while other see its more detrimental output. personally, I believe in my location, university may provide good incentives than bad incentives in intensity. To begin with, university saves a source as well as generate income within the community. In fact, it serves education for the local students where they can save their out going resources and may be potential business prospective for the local inhabitant. To relate this context, I want to share my personal experience to shed light on this issue. When I had to pursue my undergrad, I had to go far from my home. after going that place, I saw opening of various business by local like opening of hotel, stationary, pool house, etc. furthermore, after enrollment, m lot of friend belonged to this area by birth; they did not have to invest any money in logging and fooding. On the other hand, me including my several friends spent much of our money and had burden to stay in this area with frugality. In addition, university may carry out development of physical infrastructure rapidly. Electricity, road, health, etc are well developed after the university development. furthermore, even the isolated part with poor access will be radically transform to more advanced cities. For example, during my sophomore year, I learned some fact about place where I study. The place, where then education hub, however before that in dilapidated condition with poor development. According to the local, this incredible was only after university formation; more people started business and government prioritized more budget for the infrastructure in this area. Thus, university may attract large interest of people and government to change the area with great facilities. however, the university may disturb the vernal as well as pristine conditon of the locality. More people invade the area and more resource will be used up. In addition, certain pollution may be inevitable in the future. For example, during my visit in the bairahawa, I saw certain discrepancy between earlier time and after the university, in context of the environment. after university introduction, there was more waste materials in the university periphery; plus, there were more strident condition causing more disturbance in the society. however, the economic impact made obscure all the negative aspects. people enjoy more increase income and facility. To sum up, although the university have some negative consequences in the environment, its economic impact on the local people out weigh all negative output.
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university
not
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only
benefit student by providing a quality education
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but
also
the community where it establishes. All the prospect have a both constructive and destructive facets;
however
, to examine which one is more dominant determine its applicability.
Similarly
,
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university
may
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help
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some
location with greater
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positive
impact while other
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see
its more detrimental output.
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personally
, I believe in my location,
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university
may provide
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good
incentives than
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bad
incentives in intensity.

To
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begin
with,
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university
saves a source
as well
as generate income within the community. In fact, it serves education for the
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local
students where they can save their out going resources and may be potential business prospective for the
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local
inhabitant. To relate this context, I want to share my personal experience to shed light on this issue. When I had to pursue my undergrad, I had to go far from my home.
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after
going that place, I
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saw
opening of various business by
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local
like opening of hotel, stationary, pool
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house
, etc.
furthermore
, after enrollment, m lot of friend belonged to this
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area
by birth; they did not
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have to
invest any money in logging and
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fooding
.
On the other hand
, me including my several friends spent much of our money and had burden to stay in this
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area
with frugality.

In addition
,
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university
may carry out development of physical infrastructure
rapidly
. Electricity, road, health, etc are
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well developed
after the
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university
development.
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furthermore
, even the isolated part with poor access will be
radically
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transform
to more advanced cities.
For example
, during my sophomore year, I learned
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some
fact about place where I study. The place, where then education hub,
however
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before
that in dilapidated condition with poor development. According to the
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local
, this incredible was
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only
after
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university
formation; more
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people
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started
business and
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government
prioritized more budget for the infrastructure in this
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area
.
Thus
,
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university
may attract large interest of
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people
and
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government
to
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change
the
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area
with great facilities.

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however
, the
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university
may disturb the vernal
as well
as pristine
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conditon
of the locality. More
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people
invade the
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area
and more resource will be
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used
up.
In addition
, certain pollution may be inevitable in the future.
For example
, during my visit in the
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bairahawa
, I
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saw
certain discrepancy between earlier time and after the
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university
, in context of the environment.
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after
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university
introduction, there was more waste materials in the
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university
periphery; plus, there were more strident condition causing more disturbance in the society.
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however
, the economic impact made obscure all the
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negative
aspects.
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people
enjoy more increase income and facility.

To sum up, although the
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university
have
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some
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negative
consequences in the environment, its economic impact on the
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local
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people
out weigh all
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negative
output.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
452 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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