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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. v. 6
Presently, most of the animals are facing a lot of problems because of the environmental changes. So, certain people opine that wild animals should be allowed to survive in the forests rather than keeping them in zoos. However, others suggest that the wild animals can survive easily, if there was a sufficient number of zoos. In this essay, I will debate on both the viewpoints and suggest my opinion. Interestingly, the public has started suggesting that animals like Lion, Tiger and Elephant should be permitted to live their life in the forests. Though they may cause damage to the natural vegetation, it helps them to learn survival skills. Moreover, the animals, which had lost resistance against various diseases, were facing a lot of problems. A research stated that 90% of the wild animals in the United States had died after restricting their lives inside the cages. On the other hand, others suggest that zoos will help to survive a lot of endangered species. They may not allocate the same amount of food as they hunt in the wildlife, whereas it protects them from a dangerous attack. Indeed, with that development in the modern technology the managers were able to create a friendly environment. For instance, any living organism on a planet can survive easily, if the climatic conditions support them. In the conclusion, a likely reason why some people suggest that wild animals should be restricted in zoos because they will reduce their natural habitats and suffer from various illnesses. Therefore, others think that the zoos help the animals to survive in a protected environment, but they are also useful for the endangered species. I think that animals should be raised in a protected environment, although it does not help them in protecting their territory.
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, most of the
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animals
are facing
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a lot of
problems
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because
of the environmental
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changes
.
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So
, certain
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people
opine that wild
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animals
should be
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allowed
to
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survive
in the forests
rather
than keeping them in zoos.
However
, others
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suggest
that the wild
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animals
can
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survive
easily
, if there was a sufficient number of zoos. In this essay, I will debate on both the viewpoints and
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suggest
my opinion.

Interestingly
, the public has
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started
suggesting that
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animals
like Lion, Tiger and Elephant should
be permitted
to
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live
their life in the forests. Though they may cause damage to the natural vegetation, it
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helps
them to learn survival
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skills
.
Moreover
, the
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animals
, which had lost resistance against various diseases, were facing
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a lot of
problems.
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A research
stated that 90% of the wild
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animals
in the United States had
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died
after restricting their
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lives
inside the cages.

On the
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other
hand, others
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suggest
that zoos will
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help
to
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survive
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a lot of
endangered species. They may not allocate the same amount of food as they hunt in the wildlife, whereas it protects them from a
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dangerous
attack.
Indeed
, with that development in the modern technology the managers were able to create a friendly environment.
For instance
, any living organism on a planet can
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survive
easily
, if the climatic conditions support them.

In the conclusion, a likely reason why
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some
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people
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suggest
that wild
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animals
should
be restricted
in zoos
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because
they will
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reduce
their natural habitats and suffer from various illnesses.
Therefore
, others
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think
that the zoos
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help
the
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animals
to
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survive
in a protected environment,
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but
they are
also
useful for the endangered species. I
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think
that
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animals
should
be raised
in a protected environment, although it does not
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help
them in protecting their territory.
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IELTS essay Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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