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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. v. 5
There are inevitable reasons and people often think about them, to have zoos for wild animals and not to have. This essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of keeping wild animals in a restricted area. On the one hand, it's better to keep the cruel animals in zoos and there are potential unavoidable reasons. Firstly, public safety, considering the latest facts about wild animal attacks on the general public and it has been increasing drastically every year. By keeping wild animals in zoos we can avoid such attacks and thus will save human life's which is more precious. Secondly, by maintaining and providing zoos by government authorities it leads to greater impact on employment. For instance, the jobs will be like care takers, specialized doctors and other supporting staff. Apart from these above mentioned positives additionally, we are saving a wild animal's life and their survival concerns also by keeping them in zoos. Moreover, the ratio of killing animal's with and without cognizance of animals will also decrease drastically over a period time. On the other hand, most of animal feels like they are in custody of some other people, if not they usually hunt for their food as their wish. This was the problem of improper maintenance of zoos. In addition to that, since these animals are not free to roam as they're willing and ultimately these animals will habituate to certain specific activities trained by their respective caretakers and trainers. Even though, government departments having functionality for zoos, yet people and the researchers advised that, at least these animals need to placed into safari environments by allocating special zones and extra funds to maintain. To conclude, irrespective of whether the wild animals are kept in zoos with proper maintenance or not, the consequences needs to be considered by government and the public as well. In my opinion, at certain levels and for a specific group of animals. It's better to keep them in zoos while other animals need to take care from safari's.
There are inevitable reasons and
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people
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often
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think
about them, to have zoos for wild
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animals
and not to have. This essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of keeping wild
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animals
in a restricted area.

On the one hand, it's better to
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keep
the cruel
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animals
in zoos and there are potential unavoidable reasons.
Firstly
, public safety, considering the latest facts about wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
attacks on the
Consider using "public".
general public
and it has been increasing
drastically
every year. By keeping wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
in zoos we can avoid such attacks and
thus
will save human life's which is more precious.
Secondly
, by maintaining and providing zoos by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
authorities it leads to greater impact on employment.
For instance
, the jobs will be like care takers, specialized doctors and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
supporting staff. Apart from these above mentioned positives
additionally
, we are saving a wild animal's life and their survival concerns
also
by keeping them in zoos.
Moreover
, the ratio of killing animal's with and without cognizance of
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animals
will
also
decrease
drastically
over a period time.

On the
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other
hand, most of
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animal
feels like they are in custody of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, if not they
usually
hunt for their food as their wish. This was the problem of improper maintenance of zoos.
In addition
to that, since these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
are not free to roam as they're willing and
ultimately
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
will habituate to certain specific activities trained by their respective caretakers and trainers.
Even though
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
departments having functionality for zoos,
yet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and the researchers advised that, at least these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
need to placed into safari environments by allocating special zones and extra funds to maintain.

To conclude
, irrespective of whether the wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in zoos with proper maintenance or not, the consequences needs to
be considered
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and the public
as well
. In my opinion, at certain levels and for a specific group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. It's better to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them in zoos while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
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animals
need to take care from safari's.
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IELTS essay Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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