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1. Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

1. Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. v. 1
In modern times, the issue of keeping the savage animal in zoos has become highly controversial. It is frequently said that zoos are not an ideal place for the wild beast, however, others say that this should be kept in zoos for several reasons. In this easy, I will discuss both sides of this contentious argument and provide my own perspective. Generally speaking, there a wide range of reasons why people compel that animals should not be kept in zoos. Perhaps the main reasons why people are in favour of this idea is that animals have the right to dwell their natural habitats because it will make their lives happier and easier. For example, if animals live in the forest, they will freely roam around and experience different seasons as well as being around other animals. In addition, they are kept alone in a cage which can make them feel isolated. This can lead to the death of the animal and suppress their natural instinct of praying. Despite this argument, there are more convincing arguments about why zoos are important. The primary reason is the change of the natural habitats when people artificially transform the environment, they destroy the vegetation and animal's natural habitats. As a result, many species are being endangered. So, zoos are the only safest territory to protect the threatened animals. Secondly, zoos can serve as a spectacle of human beings to see many different kinds of wild species such as birds, lions, tigers, mammals, fishes, et cetera all in one place. As a consequence, people may gain immense knowledge of wildlife by observing them closely. In conclusion, this is a topic that raises strong passions on both sides of the argument. Having both sides of the viewpoints I argue that wild animals should not be held in zoos; they should enjoy their natural habitats. If we want to protect animals from poaching, we can create some wild environments rather than zoos.
In modern times, the issue of keeping the savage
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animal
in zoos has become
highly
controversial. It is
frequently
said that zoos are not an ideal place for the wild beast,
however
, others say that this should be
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kept
in zoos for several
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reasons
. In this easy, I will discuss both sides of this contentious
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argument
and provide my
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own
perspective.

Generally
speaking, there a wide range of
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reasons
why
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people
compel that
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animals
should not be
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kept
in zoos. Perhaps the main
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reasons
why
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people
are in
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favour
of this
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idea
is that
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animals
have the right to dwell their
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natural
habitats
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because
it will
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make
their
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lives
happier and easier.
For example
, if
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animals
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live
in the forest, they will
freely
roam around and experience
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different
seasons
as well
as being around other
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animals
.
In addition
, they are
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kept
alone in a cage which can
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make
them feel isolated. This can lead to the death of the
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animal
and suppress their
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natural
instinct of praying.

Despite this
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argument
, there are more convincing
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arguments
about why zoos are
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important
. The primary
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reason
is the
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change
of the
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natural
habitats when
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people
artificially
transform the environment, they
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destroy
the vegetation and animal's
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natural
habitats.
As a result
,
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many
species are
being endangered
.
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So
, zoos are the
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only
safest territory to protect the threatened
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animals
.
Secondly
, zoos can serve as a spectacle of human beings to
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see
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many
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different
kinds of wild species such as birds, lions, tigers, mammals, fishes,
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et cetera
all in one place. As a consequence,
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people
may gain immense knowledge of wildlife by observing them
closely
.

In conclusion
, this is a topic that raises strong passions on both sides of the
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argument
. Having both sides of the viewpoints I argue that wild
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animals
should not
be held
in zoos; they should enjoy their
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natural
habitats. If we want to protect
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animals
from poaching, we can create
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some
wild environments
rather
than zoos.
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IELTS essay 1. Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are some good reasons for having zoos. v. 1

Essay
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325 words
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