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Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate wi v.1

Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate wi v. 1
The question is whether people should be far away from each other for improving their relationship or not. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however, I am inclined to affirm that being far away will not solve any problem, even worse it can create some bigger troubles and then people will not be able to control them. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point: To begin with, two persons who are in a relationship know all aspects and corners of their friendship. Having awareness about problems and discerning them, is the most crucial solution in these types of cases. It goes without saying that when two individuals have been friend for a long time, they have adapted to their behavior; consequently, relying on each other for solving their troubles can lead them to remove all negative points from their friendship. Needless to say the collaboration of two minds is more effective than one. The second reason for my arguments lies in the fact that nowadays around humans are unreliable and unpredictable. Unfortunately, the overwhelming majority of people observe themselves as a judge and they attempt to tender the opinions which are incorrect. One should not forget that when people are far away from each other, other human beings can impinge on them and their relationship. Their biased and unfair comments cause a relationship to approach to its end. It is often said that almost of friendships have been finished due to interference of strange people. Moreover, the best way for optimizing a relationship is that two sides of a relationship make efforts to revive their memories such as going to the restaurant that they had meet each other for first time there or giving some favorite gifts and so on. To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that I strongly refute being far away in a relationship because the cold winds start blowing among two persons; hence, they should talk and consult each other to ease all of pains and problems.
The question is whether
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from each
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for improving their
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relationship
or not. Everyone with regard to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement;
however
, I
am inclined
to affirm that being
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far
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away
will not solve any problem, even worse it can create
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some
bigger troubles and then
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people
will not be able to control them. I feel this way for
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some
reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:

To
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begin
with, two persons who are in a
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relationship
know all aspects and corners of their friendship. Having awareness about problems and discerning them, is the most crucial solution in these types of cases. It goes without saying that when two individuals have been friend for a long time, they have adapted to their behavior;
consequently
, relying on each
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other
for solving their troubles can lead them to remove all
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negative
points from their friendship. Needless to say the collaboration of two minds is more effective than one.

The second reason for my arguments lies in the fact that nowadays around humans are unreliable and unpredictable. Unfortunately, the overwhelming majority of
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people
observe themselves as a
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judge and
they attempt to tender the opinions which are incorrect. One should not forget that when
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people
are
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far
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from each
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other
,
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other
human beings can impinge on them and their
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relationship
. Their biased and unfair comments cause a
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relationship
to approach to its
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end
. It is
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often
said that almost of friendships have
been finished
due to interference of strange
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people
.

Moreover
, the best way for optimizing a
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relationship
is that two sides of a
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relationship
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make
efforts to revive their memories such as going to the restaurant that they had
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meet
each
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other
for
first
time there or giving
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some
favorite gifts and
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so
on.

To sum up, this conclusion could
be drawn
that I
strongly
refute being
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far
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away
in a
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relationship
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because
the
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cold
winds
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start
blowing among two persons;
hence
, they should talk and consult each
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other
to
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ease
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all of pains
and problems.
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IELTS essay Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate wi v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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