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Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. Discuss both and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. v. 1
It is certain that the use of fresh water can bifurcate people based on their opposing views. While some people think that water usage should be infinite, I think some restrictions on the consumption can help countries save for the upcoming problems from global warming. One of the significant factor that people think is water is a natural resource and everybody has the right to consume it as per they want. This is because, water is required for almost every human survival tasks such as cooking, washing, cleaning clothes and various things. For example, a family of 10-15 people will require more water than the normal small families and restricted distribution can cause inconvenience to such families. As a consequence, this can lead to the stress environment between the people with different water needs. On the other hand, those who think fresh water should be used in limits agree that fresh water is very precious. By which them mean, global warming induced reduced on no rains in different regions is causing water scarcity. Hence, it becomes top-most priority of the authorities to make sure whatever reserved water they have, should be distributed with caution. To describe, the government can ban or control use of fresh water wasted during shooting of films particularly during the rain scenes. This act can save the lives of hundreds of families who may suffer from the water shortage. In conclusion, although limiting the usage of fresh water can cause discomfort to some people, I strongly feel this controlled release of fresh water can help authorities to save and be prepared for global warming effects that may hamper human survival. This action is very much needed looking at the way reserviors of the fresh water are depleting with coming time.
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can bifurcate
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based on their opposing views. While
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usage should be infinite, I
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restrictions on the consumption can
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help
countries save for the upcoming problems from global warming.

One of the significant factor that
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people
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is
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is a natural resource and everybody has the right to consume it as per they want. This is
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because
,
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is required
for almost every human survival tasks such as cooking, washing, cleaning clothes and various things.
For example
, a
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family
of 10-15
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people
will require more
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than the normal
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small
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families
and restricted distribution can cause inconvenience to such
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families
. As a consequence, this can lead to the
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stress
environment between the
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with
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needs.

On the other hand
, those who
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should be
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in limits
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is
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precious. By which them mean, global warming induced
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reduced
on no rains in
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different
regions is causing
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scarcity.
Hence
, it becomes top-most priority of the authorities to
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make
sure whatever reserved
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they have, should
be distributed
with caution. To
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describe
, the
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can ban or control
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use
of
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wasted during shooting of films
particularly
during the rain scenes. This act can save the
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lives
of hundreds of
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families
who may suffer from the
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shortage.

In conclusion
, although limiting the usage of
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fresh
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water
can cause discomfort to
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some
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, I
strongly
feel this controlled release of
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fresh
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water
can
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help
authorities to save and
be prepared
for global warming effects that may hamper human survival. This action is
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very
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much needed
looking at the way
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reserviors
of the
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are depleting with coming time.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think that fresh water supply should be controlled strictly by governments as the sources are limited. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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