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Some people think that using animal for experiment is cruel but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that using animal for experiment is cruel but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science. v. 2
Experimental tests on animals is one of the issues that some scientist employs as a prove of science. Some individuals believe that these sorts of tests are cruel behaviour against animals, however, others think that progress on sceince need some evidence, which can be proved by testing on animals. There are rational arguments on both sides of this topic which will be discussed in details, followed by my point of view. On the one side, There are several reasons that it is not fair to do laboratory tests on animals. In some cases, these sorts of tests on animals cause to kill them. Even though, Practical tests face to kill the animals under the test, at least they may result unpredictable and harmful effect on their body. For example, most of cancer cells has been injected to Moses by scientists to analysis in-vitro effect of them. As everyone know, there is no medicine till now to treat mice after injection, therefore, the result is dead mice. Hence, killing other alive pieces on the world, just only because of science is not fair at all. On the other hand, the opposite view asserts that in-vitro analysing is the next step of progress in science after in-vivo. By in-vivo analysing, scientists can make a prove to their hypothesis to some extent, but without test on alive species the results will not be completed. Under no circumstances can anyone be a voluntary to further analysing. For example, it is probably hard to produce medicine commercially as a cancer drug, because anyone will request experimental test results as a proof showing anti-cancer activity. Therefore, practical test should be performed to be the evidence of effect of medicines. TO conclude, there are valid arguments on both sides on the controversy, however, it is my firm opinion that attention should be paid to utilize animals on test, as not only are these tests vital part of the development of science, but can be used to treat the other animal illness as well. We should be more respect for animals, which they are sacrificed to progress of science.
Experimental
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animals
is one of the issues that
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some
scientist employs as a
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prove
of
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science
.
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Some
individuals believe that these sorts of
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tests
are cruel
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behaviour
against
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animals
,
however
, others
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think
that progress on
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sceince
need
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some
evidence, which can
be proved
by testing on
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animals
. There are rational arguments on both sides of this topic which will
be discussed
in
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details
, followed by my point of view.

On the one side, There are several reasons that it is not
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fair
to do laboratory
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tests
on
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animals
. In
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some
cases, these sorts of
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tests
on
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animals
cause to kill them.
Even though
, Practical
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tests
face to kill the
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animals
under the
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test
, at least they may
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result
unpredictable and harmful effect on their body.
For example
,
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most of cancer
cells has
been injected
to Moses by scientists to analysis
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in-vitro
effect of them. As everyone
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know
, there is no medicine till
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now
to treat mice after injection,
therefore
, the
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result
is dead mice.
Hence
, killing
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other
alive pieces on the world,
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just
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only
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of
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science
is not
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fair
at all.

On the
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hand, the opposite view asserts that
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in-vitro
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is the
next
step of progress in
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science
after
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in-vivo
. By
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in-vivo
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analysing
, scientists can
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make
a
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prove
to their hypothesis to
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some
extent,
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but
without
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test
on alive species the
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results
will not
be completed
. Under no circumstances can anyone be a voluntary to
further
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analysing
.
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, it is
probably
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hard
to produce medicine
commercially
as a cancer drug,
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because
anyone will request experimental
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test
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results
as a proof showing anti-cancer activity.
Therefore
, practical
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test
should
be performed
to be the evidence of effect of medicines.

TO conclude
, there are valid arguments on both sides on the controversy,
however
, it is my firm opinion that attention should
be paid
to utilize
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animals
on
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test
, as not
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only
are these
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tests
vital part of the development of
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science
,
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can be
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used
to treat the
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other
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animal
illness
as well
. We should be more respect for
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animals
, which they
are sacrificed
to progress of
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science
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that using animal for experiment is cruel but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science. v. 2

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