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30. Some people thinks that government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals. Do you agree or disagree. v.1

In recent time, the number of people belive that fast food affect the health of Human being. it is therefore suggested that higher rate on junkfood because Discourage people and I belive that government should impose on tax will health Of the people be good. Firstly imposing a higher tax can reduce a high risk of health, It is going to Motivate masses to consume food which is nutritious and beneficial to health. Also affected that needy people who eat fast food more than home food. For Instance some restaurants conduct extra money to their price menu and also Government imposed the highest tax on food like 12% to 18% which reduce their Selling on fast food around 20% additionally will make unaffordable to poor People and middleclass family that's why people consider junk food expensive as A result so people will not think of eating junk food. Moreover, putting more tax on fast food will increase the governmen’s Income so administratation should be revenue to be used to help the poor p People or in hospitals where people can cure their disease with less money In some country approves free treatment of people from recognized country Tax saving although many may argue that fast food is a necessity for those Who have not time for making a food and they can not spend more money To purchase fast food. However I feel that the government should give The tax money to the health department from food tax. In conclusion taxes on unhelthy foods will bring good income to the Government and people will be less unwell therefore, I fully agree that Government should impose giant tax on ready made food.
In recent time, the number of
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people
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belive
that
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fast
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food
affect the health of

Human being.
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it
is
therefore
suggested that higher rate on
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junkfood
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because


Discourage
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people
and
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I belive
that
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government
should impose on
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tax
will health

Of the
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people
be
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good
.

Firstly
imposing a higher
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tax
can
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reduce
a high
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risk
of health, It is going to

Motivate masses to consume
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food
which is nutritious and beneficial to health.

Also
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affected
that needy
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people
who eat
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fast
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food
more than home
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food
. For

Instance
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some
restaurants conduct extra money to their price menu and
also


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Government
imposed the highest
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tax
on
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food
like 12% to 18% which
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reduce
their

Selling on
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fast
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food
around 20%
additionally
will
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make
unaffordable to poor

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People
and
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middleclass
family that's why
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people
consider junk
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food
expensive as

A result
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so
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people
will not
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think
of eating junk food.

Moreover
, putting more
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tax
on
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fast
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food
will increase the
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governmen
’s

Income
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so
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administratation
should be revenue to be
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used
to
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help
the poor p

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People
or in hospitals where
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people
can cure their disease with less money

In
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some
country approves free treatment of
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people
from recognized country

Tax saving although
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many
may argue that
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fast
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food
is a necessity for those

Who have not time for making a
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food and
they can not spend more money

To
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purchase
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fast
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food
.
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However
I feel that the
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government
should
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give


The
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tax
money to the health department from
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food
tax.

In conclusion
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taxes
on
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unhelthy
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foods
will bring
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good
income to the

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Government
and
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people
will be less unwell
therefore
, I
fully
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agree
that

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Government
should impose giant
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tax
on
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ready made
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food
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IELTS essay Somepeople think that the government should put a tax on unhelthy food To Encourage. People to eat more healthy.

Essay
  American English
18 paragraphs
281 words
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