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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v.6

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 6
The University was designed to provide knowledge for students in the field they want to pursue. The last decision of a student will be depending on him/her. The knowledge we learned in elementary to high school was to develop our interests in a certain field. Here we will develop different kind of interest, but there's only one thing that we need to enhance. That's we will do in college, we can do whatever we want. Students can skip class whenever they want to. The main point is, it is up to you how you will learn and live your life. Even if you cry for 3 hours, the world will not adjust for you. If you find the lessons, quizzes, and exams difficult, the professors will not make it easy for you, you need to be really hard working. Because studying in a university, you are not allowed to be weak, students must be strong because studying in a university, students will be a fighter. The main function of a university was to help us grow as a better version of ourselves. There will be times when we need a break, but here, students will not only survive, but will also learn the techniques to study efficiently and to be proactive in all situations. Professors are unable to give access to knowledge for a student in different course, they can only help them to improve but the rest will be on students' hand. Therefore, I conclude that we will paint our own future not our teachers, professors, advisers, or counsellors. They will only help us to correct our mistakes, but the last decision is ours. The best way to be successful in the future is when we learn from our mistakes from the past and make it as an inspiration to succeed.
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was designed
to provide knowledge for
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students
in the field they want to pursue. The last decision of a
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student
will
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be depending
on him/her.

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The
knowledge we learned in elementary to high school was to develop our interests in a certain field. Here we will develop
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different
kind of interest,
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but
there's
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only
one thing that we need to enhance. That's we will do in college, we can do whatever we want.
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Students
can skip
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class
whenever they want to. The main point is, it is up to you how you will learn and
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live
your life. Even if you cry for 3 hours, the world will not adjust for you. If you find the lessons, quizzes, and exams difficult, the professors will not
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make
it easy for you, you need to be
really
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hard working
.
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studying in a
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university
, you are not
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allowed
to be weak,
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students
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must
be strong
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because
studying in a
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university
,
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students
will be a fighter.

The main function of a
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university
was to
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help
us grow as a better version of ourselves. There will be times when we need a break,
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but
here,
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students
will not
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only
survive,
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but
will
also
learn the techniques to study
efficiently
and to be proactive in all situations. Professors are unable to give access to knowledge for a
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student
in
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different
course, they can
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only
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help
them to
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improve
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but
the rest will be on students' hand.

Therefore
, I conclude that we will paint our
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own
future not our teachers, professors, advisers, or
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counsellors
. They will
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only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to correct our mistakes,
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but
the last decision is ours. The best way to be successful in the future is when we learn from our mistakes from the past and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it as an inspiration to succeed.
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IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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