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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v.5

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 5
As we know that knowledge is power. Generally, it is believed that the educational institutes should include those courses and subjects which are beneficial for the industry. On the other hand, there is also a widely held view that the universities should be teaching in any field of study whether they are useful for the industry or not. In my opinion, I truly believe that institutes should consider the potential need and the requirement of the market while proposing any field of study for two reasons, First, students job security and second to increase literacy rate. To begin with, Universities should start delivering knowledge as per the requirement of the industries, as it would help ease the pathway of employment for new graduates and thus lower the unemployment rate of the country. Furthermore, it will also help to fill the gap between educational institutions and the industries. For example, according to a report in herald, students with the knowledge of industry requirement performs better in their university than those who are unaware of the market needs. On the other hand, when the educational organization put their efforts in knowing the industry need and design their course accordingly, they are truly providing a boost to the literacy rate of any country. Moreover, if everyone find job immediately after graduating from a university, it will not only motivate common people to educate themselves but also improves the literacy rate of the country. For instance, in Canada the literacy rate is 90%, only because they are giving immigration to those people who are well educated and fit for their industry need. To recapitulate, in my opinion, the courses and the subjects of the universities should be designed in such a way that fulfils the need of employer and also help the country to enhance its literacy rate.
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As
we know that knowledge is power.
Generally
, it
is believed
that the educational institutes should include those courses and subjects which are beneficial for the
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industry
.
On the other hand
, there is
also
a
widely
held view that the
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universities
should be teaching in any field of study whether they are useful for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
or not. In my opinion, I
truly
believe that institutes should consider the potential need and the requirement of the market while proposing any field of study for two reasons,
First
, students job security and second to increase
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literacy
rate.

To
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begin
with,
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Universities
should
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start
delivering knowledge as per the requirement of the
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industries
, as it would
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help
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ease
the pathway of employment for new graduates and
thus
lower the unemployment
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rate
of the
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country
.
Furthermore
, it will
also
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help
to fill the gap between educational institutions and the
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industries
.
For example
, according to a report in herald, students with the knowledge of
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industry
requirement performs better in their
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university
than those who are unaware of the market needs.

On the other hand
, when the educational organization put their efforts in knowing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
need and design their course
accordingly
, they are
truly
providing a boost to the
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literacy
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rate
of any
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country
.
Moreover
, if everyone
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find
job immediately after graduating from a
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university
, it will not
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only
motivate common
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people
to educate themselves
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but
also
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improves
the
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literacy
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rate
of the
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country
.
For instance
, in Canada the
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literacy
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rate
is 90%,
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only
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because
they are giving immigration to those
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people
who are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well educated
and fit for their
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industry
need.

To recapitulate, in my opinion, the courses and the subjects of the
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universities
should
be designed
in such a way that
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fulfils
the need of employer and
also
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help
the
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country
to enhance its
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literacy
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rate
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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