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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.24

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 24
There are different opinions about this matter, basically we need to respect it. Somehow, I believe that parents are the first teacher of children. Parents should be the one who teaches their children first about manners. In the first 3 years of a kid, they will easily adapt to the language and attitude of their surrounded environment. Therefore, if a child saw negative act on others, they will do it as well. What children see when they are young, they bring it until they grew up. The school is also a place to learn this, but you will not believe that the teachers will expect that child already knew the most basic manners as of it is taught at home. If a kid grew up rude to others and mostly lying, it is possible that this kid's parent didn't pay attention much on their children growth and personality. I believe that the most important role of being a parent was to be there for their children all the time, to guide them with their decisions, to help them grow as a better person, to discipline them if they make negative acts and to be there to help them mould their personality. In conclusion, it is the responsibility of a mother and father to take care of their children until they become the person they are meant to be. Teachers are the second parent that will guide and teach them to show the right path in life. There will be no other great teacher in this life aside from our parents.
There are
different
opinions about this matter,
basically
we need to respect it.

Somehow, I believe that
parents
are the
first
teacher
of
children
.
Parents
should be the one who teaches their
children
first
about manners. In the
first
3 years of a kid, they will
easily
adapt to the language and attitude of their surrounded environment.
Therefore
, if a child
saw
negative
act on others, they will do it
as well
. What
children
see
when they are young, they bring it until they grew up.

The school is
also
a place to learn this,
but
you will not believe that the
teachers
will
expect
that child already knew the most basic manners as of it
is taught
at home. If a kid grew up rude to others and
mostly
lying, it is possible that this kid's
parent
didn't pay attention much on their
children
growth and personality.

I believe that the most
important
role of being a
parent
was to be there for their
children
all the time, to guide them with their decisions, to
help
them grow as a better person, to discipline them if they
make
negative
acts and to be there to
help
them
mould
their personality.

In conclusion
, it is the responsibility of a mother and father to take care of their
children
until they become the person they
are meant
to be.
Teachers
are the second
parent
that will guide and teach them to
show
the right path in life. There will be no other great
teacher
in this life aside from our
parents
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 24

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
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