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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What in your own opinion is the main function of a university? v.1

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What in your own opinion is the main function of a university? v. 1
In recent times, employers of labour have complained that job seekers do not meet their employment requirement. Therefore, some individuals think schools ought to incorporate skill aquisition while impacting knowledge, whereas, some other people affirm that the main function of a higher institution is to teach students irrespective of the usefulness of the course in the labour market. In my opinion, the primary function of a university is to teach students to be useful in their society by furnishing them with both knowledge and handwork. Firstly, universities should equip undergraduates with hands-on experience alongside their studies because it helps them to be able to function effectively in their chosen career. For example, some Nigerian polytechnics' curriculum now involves a year internship programme for everyone, thus, creating a platform of opportunity for the pupils. Hence, this will increase their employability chances. Secondly, for a graduate to be able to work effectively, theoretical knowledge alone is not adequate as it is synonymous to throwing an amateur swimmer into the ocean to start swimming. Therefore, all learning centers should ensure that they include a reasonable period of time for students to learn as it contributes to being confident at work. For instance, the medical curriculum of every college of medicine involves a compolsory one year housemanship. Consequently, most doctors discharge their duties cofidently. In conclusion, the main function of a university is both knowledge and skill aquisition and these should be well taught so as to help graduates secure jobs quickly and enhance their ability to overcome challenges.
In recent times, employers of
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have complained that job seekers do not
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meet
their employment requirement.
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some
individuals
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think
schools ought to incorporate
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skill
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aquisition
while impacting
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knowledge
, whereas,
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some
other
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people
affirm that the main
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function
of a higher institution is to teach students irrespective of the usefulness of the course in the
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labour
market. In my opinion, the primary
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function
of a university is to teach students to be useful in their society by furnishing them with both
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knowledge
and handwork.

Firstly
, universities should equip undergraduates with hands-on experience alongside their studies
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because
it
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helps
them to be able to
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function
effectively
in their chosen career.
For example
,
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some
Nigerian polytechnics' curriculum
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now
involves a year internship
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programme
for everyone,
thus
, creating a platform of opportunity for the pupils.
Hence
, this will increase their employability chances.

Secondly
, for a graduate to be able to work
effectively
, theoretical
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knowledge
alone is not adequate as it is synonymous to
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throwing
an amateur swimmer into the ocean to
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start
swimming.
Therefore
, all learning centers should ensure that they include a reasonable period of time for students to learn as it contributes to being confident at work.
For instance
, the medical curriculum of every college of medicine involves a
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compolsory
one year
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housemanship
.
Consequently
, most doctors discharge their duties
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cofidently
.

In conclusion
, the main
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function
of a university is both
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knowledge
and
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skill
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aquisition
and these should be well taught
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so as to
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help
graduates secure jobs
quickly
and enhance their ability to overcome challenges.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What in your own opinion is the main function of a university? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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