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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions. v.6

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 6
Human life is divided into various phases. Each phase brings about different charms. Although, some people will argue that, adult life is the most enjoyable period of life, I believe teenage has the greatest charm despite all the personal conflicts people go through. Teenagers are regarded as the people of age group of 13-19 years. This is the period when a person is going through a transition from childhood to adulthood. Hence, everything seems so different and people start to dream about life. Moreover, this is the period when people get attracted to the opposite gender and start to feel love. As a result, everything feels so beautiful and life comes to us with a different meaning. In addition to that, people feel a bit arrogant and try to defy the common rules of the society which may limit their activities of adolescence. That means, this is the life of being in love, showing date and being rebellious. On the other hand, adulthood is the period of wisdom. People become matured enough due to all experiences gathered during the adolescence. In short, it can be called as the period of stability. Any arrogant or short sighted decision is usually avoided during this period while those decisions are common among teenagers. For this, life doesn’t face much difficulty, rather can overcome most of the problems which are nearly impossible during teenage. In the end, it is obvious that facing & solving problems of life is easier in adulthood & thus life becomes smooth. But, the colour which shows in the teenage is incomparable with that of adulthood which makes it more attractive.
Human
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life
is divided
into various phases. Each phase brings about
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different
charms. Although,
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some
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people
will argue that, adult
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life
is the most enjoyable
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period
of
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life
, I believe teenage has the greatest charm despite all the personal conflicts
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people
go through.

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Teenagers
are regarded
as the
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people
of age group of 13-19 years. This is the
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period
when a person is going through a transition from childhood to adulthood.
Hence
, everything seems
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so
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different
and
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people
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start
to dream about
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life
.
Moreover
, this is the
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period
when
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people
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get
attracted to the opposite gender and
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start
to feel
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love
.
As a result
, everything feels
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so
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beautiful
and
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life
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comes
to us with a
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different
meaning.
In addition
to that,
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people
feel a bit arrogant and try to defy the common
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rules
of the society which may limit their activities of adolescence. That means, this is the
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life
of being in
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love
, showing date and being rebellious.

On the other hand
, adulthood is the
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period
of wisdom.
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People
become matured
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enough
due to all experiences gathered during the adolescence. In short, it can
be called
as the
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period
of stability. Any arrogant or
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short sighted
decision is
usually
avoided during this
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period
while those decisions are common among
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teenagers
. For this,
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life
doesn’t face much difficulty,
rather
can overcome most of the problems which are
nearly
impossible during teenage.

In the
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end
, it is obvious that facing & solving problems of
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life
is easier in adulthood &
thus
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life
becomes smooth.
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But
, the
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colour
which
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shows
in the teenage is incomparable with that of adulthood which
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makes
it more attractive.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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