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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v.21

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v. 21
Whether a university’s role should be to prepare graduates for specific jobs or simply to educate without a particular vocation in mind is a debatable issue. This essay believes that universities fulfill both purposes. The essay will first discuss the function of vocational courses, followed by a discussion of more traditional tertiary education. Some students have a very specific job in mind when they enroll at university. Medicine, dentistry and accountancy have clear career paths and they allow people to focus on and then undertake a certain profession upon graduation. This suits those who have decided on a career and it avoids them wasting time studying a more general subject like English. For instance, in the United States you must complete four years of higher education before you can study law and many feel that these four years are a waste of time, that would have been better used focusing on their chosen discipline. However, this is not suitable for everyone and many people have no idea what job they would like to do when they are 18. For these young people, it is better to do a non-vocational course, such as philosophy and simply add to their intellect without a career goal in mind. If they were forced to study a more practical subject, they are more likely to quit or become disillusioned because they don’t see the point of their chosen subject. For example, The Times recently reported that only 50% of law graduates actually want to become lawyers at the end of their studies. In conclusion, the function of college is to both prepare students for the workforce and provide knowledge and which one a person chooses should depend on their preference at the time.
Whether a university’s role should be to prepare graduates for specific jobs or
simply
to educate without a particular vocation in mind is a debatable issue. This essay believes that universities fulfill both purposes. The essay will
first
discuss the function of vocational courses, followed by a discussion of more traditional tertiary education.

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Some
students have a
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very
specific job in mind when they enroll at university. Medicine, dentistry and accountancy have
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clear
career
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paths and
they
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allow
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people
to focus on and then undertake a certain profession upon graduation. This suits those who have decided on a career and it avoids them wasting
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time
studying a more general subject like English.
For instance
, in the United States you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
complete four years of higher education
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before
you can study law and
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many feel
that these four years are a waste of
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time
, that would have been better
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used
focusing on their chosen discipline.

However
, this is not suitable for everyone and
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have no
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idea
what job they would like to do when they are 18. For these young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, it is better to do a non-vocational course, such as philosophy and
simply
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
to their intellect without a career goal in mind. If they
were forced
to study a more practical subject, they are more likely to quit or become disillusioned
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because
they don’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the point of their chosen subject.
For example
, The
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Times
recently reported that
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only
50% of law graduates actually want to become lawyers at the
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end
of their studies.

In conclusion
, the function of college is to both prepare students for the workforce and provide knowledge and which one a person chooses should depend on their preference at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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