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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v.8

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v. 8
In order to decrease the number of road accidents, it is believed by some people that severe punishments for offending drivers are the solution. On the other hand, others argue that better methods exist to solve this issue. While both views hold true, I believe that drivers who offend must receive strict punishments. Traffic accidents pose a huge threat to the public, and driving offences must not be taken lightly. If governments implemented strict rules and heavily penalized drivers who broke these rules, individuals would take driving seriously and the number of road accidents would diminish. For instance, speaking on the phone or texting are some of the main reasons for traffic accidents, yet many countries do not impose serious punishments on drivers who commit these acts, specifically in developing countries. Additionally, there are numerous other methods to cut down on the number of road offences. For instance, installing more cameras and setting speed limits in crowded places are some of the most important measures that can be taken to reduce accidents. Furthermore, in some developing countries where the number of traffic accidents is the highest, governments should ensure that only worthy individuals receive a driving license. In other words, due to the corruption in some countries, many individuals who do not know how to drive properly get their driving license, thus, causing traffic accidents and threatening the safety of citizens. To conclude, the issue of ensuring road safety is vital for all countries, due to that, multiple steps must be taken. The most important step is imposing strict punishments for driving offences so that drivers would be more careful. Moreover, punishing untrustworthy drivers as well as adding cameras and speed limits are some of the other methods that would decrease traffic problems.
In order to decrease the
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some
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people
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drivers
are the solution. On the
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hand, others argue that better methods exist to solve this issue. While both views hold true, I believe that
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drivers
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who
offend
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must
receive strict punishments.

Traffic
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accidents
pose a huge threat to the public, and
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driving
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offences
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must
not
be taken
lightly
. If
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governments
implemented strict
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rules
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penalized
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drivers
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who
broke these
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rules
, individuals would take
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driving
seriously
and the
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number
of
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road
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accidents
would diminish.
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, speaking on the phone or texting are
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some of the
main reasons for
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traffic
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accidents
,
yet
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many
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countries
do not impose serious punishments on
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drivers
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who
commit these acts,
specifically
in
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developing countries
.

Additionally
, there are numerous
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other
methods to
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of
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road
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offences
.
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of the most
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.
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, in
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developing
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countries
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traffic
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accidents
is the highest,
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governments
should ensure that
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only
worthy individuals receive a
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driving
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other
words, due to the corruption in
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countries
,
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individuals
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who
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their
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driving
license,
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traffic
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accidents
and threatening the safety of citizens.

To conclude
, the issue of ensuring
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road
safety is vital for all
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countries
, due to that, multiple steps
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must
be taken
. The most
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important
step is imposing strict punishments for
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driving
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offences
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so
that
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drivers
would be more careful.
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drivers
as well
as adding cameras and speed limits are
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some of the
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methods that would decrease
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problems.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cours v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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