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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v.19

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 19
It is believed that a university has the role to educate students and prepare them for the future. Each individual allows to pursuit their right to learn several of subjects relying on their goals. However, it is argued that the most important function of a college or university is to prepare learners for the job. In my view, a university should regard people eagerness in term of their future work. That is why the most valuable thing for a university is to create an environment for giving space for learners to develop their skills for their future job. University has to spread awareness that becoming competent in school can affect students’ performance at workplaces. Even though the essential of learning in university is to pass exams, learners should realise that the real exam is after their completion of the study. They will experience how to combat with others for getting a decent job. Therefore, people who prepare earlier will gain more benefits. Based on this case, a university has the responsibility to create competitive circumstance such as in a workplace. Again, preparing students for the future brings some challenges that the university has to accept. Such challenges involved more practical education rather than being confined to theoretical lessons. It is inevitable that practical lessons are more important and effective than the theory we learn in university. Another reason is the best way to develop someone’s skill is by creating space for learners in term of their interest. Nonetheless, this is the main problem that learners face when they enter in higher education - they will lose their passion due to school curriculum which deters them to get involved in further on non-academic activities. As the result, university tends to limit students community to express and show their skill. In conclusion, a university should understand that preparing students for workplaces is an indispensable part in this era. University may start by setting the lecture class such workplace environment for the case and providing beneficial programmes to enhance students’ skill as an individual or group.
It
is believed
that a
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university
has the role to educate
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students
and prepare them for the
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future
. Each individual
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allows
to pursuit their right to learn several of subjects relying on their goals.
However
, it
is argued
that the most
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important
function of a college or
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university
is to prepare
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learners
for the job. In my view, a
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university
should regard
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
eagerness in term of their
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future
work.
That is
why the most valuable thing for a
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university
is to create an environment for giving space for
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learners
to develop their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
for their
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future
job.

University
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has to
spread awareness that becoming competent in school can affect
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students’
performance at workplaces.
Even though
the essential of learning in
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university
is to pass exams,
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learners
should
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realise
that the real exam is after their completion of the study. They will experience how to combat with others for getting a decent job.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who prepare earlier will gain more benefits. Based on this case, a
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university
has the responsibility to create competitive circumstance such as in a workplace.

Again, preparing
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students
for the
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future
brings
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some
challenges that the
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university
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
accept. Such challenges involved more practical education
rather
than
being confined
to theoretical lessons. It is inevitable that practical lessons are more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and effective than the theory we learn in university.

Another reason is the best way to develop someone’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
is by creating space for
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learners
in term of their interest. Nonetheless, this is the main problem that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learners
face when they enter in higher education
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
they will lose their passion due to school curriculum which deters them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in
further
on non-academic activities. As the result,
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university
tends to limit
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students
community to express and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
.

In conclusion
, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
should understand that preparing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
for workplaces is an indispensable part in this era.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
by setting the lecture
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
such workplace environment for the case and providing beneficial
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
to enhance
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students’
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
as an individual or group.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 19

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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