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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways etc. )? Why? v.1

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways etc. )? Why? v. 1
The transportation system is one of the serious problems in this day which is related to traffic congestion and air pollution. A suitable decision will always think by the government to cope this issue. There are two points which the government can choose, whether they want to expense money on developing roads and highways or spend money on improving public transportation. I definitely agree for improving public transportation for some reasons. First and foremost, it is an impossible way to build roads and highways today, because the large areas are not available. For instance, in an urban area, it is hard to find a wide place because most of these places in here are used to built houses and other building. Thus, the government cannot find a space to build new roads or highways. Whereas, if the government still aspire to continue this program it seems that a new problem will create, such as traffic jam. In addition, it is wise if the government can reduce the number of private vehicles and improve the number of public transportation. There was a sharp rise of private transportation every year. However, if the government can reduce it by making a distinct rule to appeal the society to use public transportation, the traffic issue would be in a better situation. Thus, traffic jam can solve and air pollution can reduce too. In conclusion, I believe that improving public transportation is the best way to solve the transportation problem, rather than building roads and highways. When the government builds new ones, the numbers of vehicles do not decrease, but it will increase.
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system is one of the serious problems in this day which
is related
to
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traffic
congestion and air pollution. A suitable decision will always
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think
by the
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government
to cope this issue. There are two points which the
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government
can choose, whether they want to expense money on developing
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roads
and
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highways
or spend money on improving
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public
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transportation
. I definitely
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agree
for improving
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public
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transportation
for
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some
reasons.

First
and foremost, it is an impossible way to build
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roads
and
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highways
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today
,
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because
the large areas are not available.
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, in an urban area, it is
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hard
to find a wide place
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because
most of these places in here are
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used
to built
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houses
and other building.
Thus
, the
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government
cannot find a space to build new
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roads
or
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highways
. Whereas, if the
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government
still
aspire to continue this program it seems that a new problem will create, such as
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traffic
jam.

In addition
, it is wise if the
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government
can
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reduce
the number of private vehicles and
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improve
the number of
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public
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transportation
. There was a sharp rise of private
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transportation
every year.
However
, if the
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government
can
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reduce
it by making a distinct
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rule
to appeal the society to
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use
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public
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transportation
, the
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traffic
issue would be in a better situation.
Thus
,
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traffic
jam can solve and air pollution can
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reduce
too.

In conclusion
, I believe that improving
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public
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transportation
is the best way to solve the
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transportation
problem,
rather
than building
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roads
and
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highways
. When the
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government
builds new ones, the numbers of vehicles do not decrease,
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but
it will increase.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways etc. )? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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