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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v.16

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 16
Currently, there are huge debates about the main purpose of educational institutions; such as their task should be to prepare students with knowledge and expertise for employer needs or prove graduates with access to the material for their own analysing. This essay will examine both sides of the argument and will highlight the most important task of universities. There is no doubt that graduates must be prepared to go to the work having the knowledge and skills of the field where they plan to start work. These will improve the quality of graduates’ work and give a good impression to the employer. Also, business will be benefitted from their new employees and will allow to an organisation to survive in the rapidly developing business environment. For example, it is highly important to have the necessary knowledge to work as an accountant, otherwise, a person would not know what to do, how to perform the tasks with requirements which later will be checked by auditors. If the work was not done without necessary accuracy, the company will face many problems with the government and tax officers. Therefore, I firmly believe that it is highly important for universities to teach their students the knowledge and skills, which are essential to the business. Despite these arguments, there is also a case for advocating that the main task of universities is to provide an access to the materials and other resources their students for their own learning and analysing. Indeed, I believe the access is extremely important, however, without teaching how appropriate to use these materials most of the students cannot do it in a proper way required by the employer. For instance, there are a lot of different examples of preparing financial statements, the way its look and only expert can say in which particular situations could be prepared, analysed and be used this way of preparation of financial statement or a different one as well as in what kind of area could be used. Having considered both sides of the issue, I would argue that although universities should provide an access to knowledge for their students, educational institutions should teach how to use, learn and analyse them.
Currently
, there are huge debates about the main purpose of educational institutions; such as their
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task
should be to prepare
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students
with
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knowledge
and expertise for employer needs or prove graduates with
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access
to the material for their
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own
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analysing
. This essay will examine both sides of the argument and will highlight the most
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important
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task
of universities.

There is no doubt that graduates
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must
be prepared
to go to the
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work
having the
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knowledge
and
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skills
of the field where they plan to
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start
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work
. These will
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improve
the quality of graduates’
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work
and give a
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good
impression to the employer.
Also
, business will be
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benefitted
from their new employees and will
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allow
to an
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organisation
to survive in the
rapidly
developing business environment.
For example
, it is
highly
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important
to have the necessary
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knowledge
to
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work
as an accountant,
otherwise
, a person would not know what to do, how to perform the
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tasks
with requirements which later will be
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checked
by auditors. If the
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work
was not done without necessary accuracy, the
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company
will face
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many
problems with the
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government
and tax officers.
Therefore
, I
firmly
believe that it is
highly
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important
for universities to teach their
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students
the
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knowledge
and
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skills
, which are essential to the business.

Despite these arguments, there is
also
a case for advocating that the main
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task
of universities is to provide an
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access
to the materials and other resources their
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students
for their
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own
learning and
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analysing
.
Indeed
, I believe the
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access
is
extremely
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important
,
however
, without teaching how appropriate to
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use
these materials most of the
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students
cannot do it
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in a proper way
required by the employer.
For instance
, there are
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a lot of
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different
examples of preparing financial statements, the way its look and
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only
expert can say in which particular situations could
be prepared
,
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analysed
and be
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used
this way of preparation of financial statement or a
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different
one
as well
as in what kind of area could be
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used
.

Having considered both sides of the issue, I would argue that although universities should provide an
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access
to
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knowledge
for their
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students
, educational institutions should teach how to
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use
, learn and
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analyse
them.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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