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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v.15

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 15
These days, universities provide various courses which were taught by families earlier like tile fixing to makeup techniques. In spite of making such arrangements for everyone to learn these skills, some exceptional people believe that universities teach subjects only rather than focusing on real world use. First of all, universities have to focus on whole class instead of a bunch of students. So, universities have to come up with a course material which can be grasped by a majority of students. Employers do expect a specialised skill from an individual. However, it is an unrealistic expectation from the universities to prepare each student as per the employer's requirements. Moreover, it is difficult for a student also to imagine the need for the real world and learn the subject without experiencing it. For example, you ask a student to write a program to handle the security threats on servers. It could be very difficult for a student to write such a program as there are many viruses which target only certain types of servers. Another important area where universities focus is to provide the basic knowledge of the entire subject and let the students choose the job of their interest. For instance, computer engineering course teaches about databases, programming languages as well as hardware. It is up to a student to choose whether he wants to be a programmer developer or a database designer. It is certainly beneficial for the employers as well. If a fresher knows many subjects, an employer can train him on any subject as per the project requirement. For example, Infosys hires thousands of computer engineers every year in place of a Java certified students. Infosys can train computer engineer for testing or support department. However, it is difficult to train a java developer for web designing. I believe universities are just doing the best what they could do to prepare a student for the upcoming opportunities and challenges.
These days,
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universities
provide various courses which
were taught
by families earlier like tile fixing to makeup techniques.
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In spite of
making such arrangements for everyone to learn these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
,
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some
exceptional
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people
believe that
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universities
teach
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subjects
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
rather
than focusing on real world
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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universities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
focus on whole
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class
instead
of a bunch of
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students
.
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So
,
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universities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with a course material which can
be grasped
by a majority of
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students
. Employers do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
a
Possible spelling mistake. 'specialised' is British English.
specialised
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
from an individual.
However
, it is an unrealistic expectation from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
to prepare each
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student
as per the employer's requirements.
Moreover
, it is difficult for a
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student
also
to imagine the need for the real world and learn the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
without experiencing it.
For example
, you ask a
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student
to write a program to handle the security threats on servers. It could be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult for a
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student
to write such a program as there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
viruses which target
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
certain types of servers.

Another
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
area where
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universities
focus is to provide the basic knowledge of the entire
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subject
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
choose the job of their interest.
For instance
, computer engineering course teaches about databases, programming languages
as well
as hardware. It is up to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
to choose whether he wants to be a programmer developer or a database designer. It is
certainly
beneficial for the employers
as well
. If a fresher knows
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
, an employer can train him on any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
as per the project requirement.
For example
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Infosys
hires thousands of computer engineers every year in place of a Java certified
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "student"?
students
.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Infosys
can train computer engineer for testing or support department.
However
, it is difficult to train a java developer for web designing.

I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
universities
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
doing the best what they could do to prepare a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
for the upcoming opportunities and challenges.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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