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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the work place. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whatever the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v.1

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the work place. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whatever the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 1
Many people consider that the purpose of tertiary education is to equip the students with necessary information and skills to pursue a professional career, while others are of the view that universities should only impart knowledge to the students, without taking into consideration, their future endeavours. In my opinion, these higher educational institutes represent the final tiers of a proper educational program and hence, should cater for both the professional education, as well as, the knowledge as a whole, because all forms of education eventually help individuals in their future careers. The professional expertise is extremely important for any nation to prosper and survive globally. In other words, in this era of industrialization, technically sound people are required by the employers, with a proper degree certification as a prerequisite to acquire a job. Similarly, the doctors, engineers, IT professionals and other technocrats have to acquire specific degrees and some technical skills to be able to perform their duties well and these are learnt only in a university with complete focus on technical requirements essential for them in their career. It is, therefore, obvious that universities have a crucial role to play in this regard. On the other hand, universities should also cater for the subjects like social sciences and art. This form of learning is extremely essential because it would open new horizons of thought and broaden the minds of a nation. Moreover, it would help develop creativity, an ability to see the other side of the picture, and to think out of the box. All these qualities would also help the students in their professional career, which ever they choose in the future. To conclude, I have a firm believe that universities should not only impart general knowledge but also serve the purpose of producing technically sound individuals, taking into consideration, the requirements of the employers
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consider that the purpose of tertiary education is to equip the students with necessary information and
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skills
to pursue a
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professional
career, while others are of the view that
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universities
should
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only
impart knowledge to the students, without taking into consideration, their future
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endeavours
. In my opinion, these higher educational institutes represent the final tiers of a proper educational program and
hence
, should cater for both the
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professional
education,
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as well as
, the knowledge as a whole,
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because
all forms of education
eventually
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help
individuals in their future careers.

The
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professional
expertise is
extremely
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important
for any nation to prosper and survive globally. In
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other
words, in this era of industrialization,
technically
sound
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people
are required
by the employers, with a proper degree certification as a prerequisite to acquire a job.
Similarly
, the doctors, engineers, IT
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professionals
and
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other
technocrats
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have to
acquire specific degrees and
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some
technical
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skills
to be able to perform their duties well and these are
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only
in a
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university
with complete focus on technical requirements essential for them in their career. It is,
therefore
, obvious that
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universities
have a crucial role to play in this regard.

On the
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other
hand,
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universities
should
also
cater for the subjects like social sciences and art. This form of learning is
extremely
essential
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because
it would open new horizons of
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thought
and broaden the minds of a nation.
Moreover
, it would
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help
develop creativity, an ability to
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see
the
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other
side of the picture, and to
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think
out of the box. All these qualities would
also
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help
the students in their
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professional
career, which ever they choose in the future.

To conclude
, I have a firm believe that
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universities
should not
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only
impart general knowledge
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but
also
serve the purpose of producing
technically
sound individuals, taking into consideration, the requirements of the employers
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the work place. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whatever the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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