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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. what are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue? v.14

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. what are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 14
Global warming is a global concern and requires utmost attention from all the nations worldwide. The primary reasons are deforested lands and rise in pollution levels. Therefore, measures are needed by both, government and individuals, to combat this exigency situation. First, the aspect that has led to global warming is deforestation. In other words, plants and trees are getting cut regularly to construct buildings and infrastructure, in order to meet the increasing demands of the population. As a result, the ecosystem is getting disturbed with limited occurrence of rainfall and also, the water levels below the ground are shrinking. Another issue resulting in global warming is pollution. Pollution in forms such as water and air, has led to extinction of several species resulting in disturbances in the proper functioning of the food chain. Thus, immediate steps are required to protect the earth as glaciers in the Arctic and the Antartic are melting each day. One possible solution to tackle this concern is plant more and more trees, both at houses and neighbourhood by individuals and public places such as gardens and road-side by government. Another measure that can aid pollution is to lessen the use of personal vehicles and promote the use of public transport. Moreover, use of plastic should be banned and government should motivate people to use bio-degradeable items. The government should impose rules and strict punishments on industries throwing waste inappropriately on land and in water. In conclusion, it is evident that global warming is a problem, arising from the cutting down of trees and a surge in waste materials in water bodies and lands. However, it can be resolved by taking corrective measures and a collaboration is needed from not just individuals, but societies and countries and the entire world as a whole.
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Global
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warming
is a
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global
concern and requires utmost attention from all the nations worldwide. The primary reasons
are deforested
lands and rise in
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pollution
levels.
Therefore
, measures
are needed
by both,
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government
and individuals, to combat this exigency situation.

First
, the aspect that has led to
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global
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warming
is deforestation.
In other words
, plants and trees are getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
regularly
to construct buildings and infrastructure, in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the increasing demands of the population.
As a result
, the ecosystem is getting disturbed with limited occurrence of rainfall and
also
, the water levels below the ground are shrinking. Another issue resulting in
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global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
is
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pollution
.
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Pollution
in forms such as water and air, has led to extinction of several species resulting in disturbances in the proper functioning of the food chain.
Thus
, immediate steps
are required
to protect the earth as glaciers in the Arctic and the
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Antartic
are melting each day.

One possible solution to tackle this concern is plant more and more trees, both at
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houses
and
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neighbourhood
by individuals and public places such as gardens and road-side by
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government
. Another measure that can aid
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pollution
is to lessen the
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use
of personal vehicles and promote the
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use
of public transport.
Moreover
,
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use
of plastic should
be banned
and
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government
should motivate
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people
to
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use
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bio-degradeable
items. The
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government
should impose
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rules
and strict punishments on industries throwing waste
inappropriately
on land and in water.

In conclusion
, it is evident that
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global
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warming
is a problem, arising from the cutting down of trees and a surge in waste materials in water bodies and lands.
However
, it can
be resolved
by taking corrective measures and a collaboration
is needed
from not
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just
individuals,
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but
societies and countries and the entire world as a whole.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. what are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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