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Some people think that to reduce traffic problem people will come from rural areas to live in urban areas. What extant do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that to reduce traffic problem people will come from rural areas to live in urban areas. What extant v. 2
It is thought that traffic and tranportation problem will be eradicated if people migrate from countryside to urban area. However, I think it will multiply the issue rather than solving it. Urbanization will bring a lot more traffic problems to cities because of increase in urban population, more transport services are required to facilitate people. In this essay I will discuss my opinion with example. Urbanization means there will be more vehicles in cities as citizen from different age groups will need them to move around. In oder to fulfil their task and responsibilities, residence will need vehicles to go to restaurants, education centers and hospitals. For instance, common people required vehicle like car and buses to complete their tasks such as jobs, festivals and education. This will augment the traffic congestion on roads instead of decreasing it. In addition, if urbanization will speed up, urban area will expand for sure which means further development of houses and infrastructure will require. This development of housing and infrastructures will cause burden on existing roads. Heavy lorries, for example loaded with construction material will block the traffic of old roads. Therefore, encouraging people to live in the countryside will reduce the traffic problem. Notwithstanding the idea of urbanization, I think rural and countryside will develop both economically and physically. If employment opportunities would provided there, inhabitants of these area will not come to metropolitan areas to seek jobs. This would reduce demand of taxi and buses from transportation sector. Also, as long as these areas would equipped with facilities like gardens, recreational places, hospitals, educational centers, entertainment and parks, people would not visit cities again and again. By reducing number of trips, transport needs can be easily fulfilled and traffic crowding will not seen. To conclude, after transforming suburbs into self-sufficient industrial, agriculture commercial hubs, traffic and transportation issue can be solved in already exiting cities. Whereas, encouraging people to migrate from urban to rural areas will amplify this issue.
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thought
that
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traffic
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tranportation
problem will
be eradicated
if
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people
migrate from countryside to
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urban
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area
.
However
, I
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think
it will multiply the issue
rather
than solving it. Urbanization will bring a lot more
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traffic
problems to
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cities
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because
of increase in
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urban
population, more transport services
are required
to facilitate
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people
. In this essay I will discuss my opinion with example.

Urbanization means there will be more vehicles in
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cities
as citizen from
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different
age groups will need them to
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move
around. In
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oder
to fulfil their task and responsibilities, residence will need vehicles to go to restaurants, education centers and hospitals.
For instance
, common
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people
required vehicle like car and buses to complete their tasks such as jobs, festivals and education. This will augment the
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traffic
congestion on roads
instead
of decreasing it.
In addition
, if urbanization will
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speed up
,
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urban
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area
will expand for sure which means
further
development of
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houses
and infrastructure will require. This development of housing and infrastructures will cause burden on existing roads. Heavy lorries,
for example
loaded with construction material will block the
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traffic
of
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old
roads.
Therefore
, encouraging
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people
to
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live
in the countryside will
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reduce
the
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traffic
problem.

Notwithstanding the
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idea
of urbanization, I
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think
rural and countryside will develop both
economically
and
physically
. If employment opportunities would
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provided
there, inhabitants of these
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area
will not
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come
to metropolitan
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areas
to seek jobs. This would
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reduce
demand of taxi and buses from transportation sector.
Also
, as long as these
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areas
would
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equipped
with facilities like gardens, recreational places, hospitals, educational centers, entertainment and parks,
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people
would not visit
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cities
again and again. By reducing number of trips, transport needs can be
easily
fulfilled and
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traffic
crowding will not
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seen
.

To conclude
, after transforming suburbs into self-sufficient industrial, agriculture commercial hubs,
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traffic
and transportation issue can
be solved
in already exiting
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cities
.
“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, encouraging
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people
to migrate from
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urban
to rural
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areas
will amplify this issue.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that to reduce traffic problem people will come from rural areas to live in urban areas. What extant v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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