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Some people think that to have a successful life you have to have University education, while others think it’s not that important, discuss both views and give your opinion based on personal experience and knowledge. v.2

Some people think that to have a successful life you have to have University education, while others think it’s not that important, v. 2
The assertion that university degree is a mandatory to have a successful life seems to me constitutes a fundamental misunderstanding among people. Whether to agree it or not is a thought provoking question. Personally, I, like many others, tend to totally agree the viewpoint that without university education become successful is nearly impossible. The opponents of the argument, clearly put the point forward that there are many examples of successful people around the world who did not completed university education and still became successful most famously Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg and Steve Jobs. Their argument do have some justification and might be right to some extent. However, the reality is quite different and these people are some exceptional examples which cannot be used as general rule. On the other hand, there are millions of examples of successful university graduates who have been succeeded because of their academic credentials. Even Bill Gates, Zuckerberg and Steve jobs had the similar level of programming skills as a university graduate. Again, those who believe that academic degree is not mandatory to be successful in life usually mention that prosperity does not depend on academic qualifications but upon opportunities. This statement also may be true. But, I think opportunity does not come to all and bright academic background is a giant leap towards opportunities. Moreover, a University is not only a place of acquiring academic degree but also a place to learn so many things that help us to become more rounded as human being which is also an indispensable criterion of success. Apart from the above mentioned reasons, the opponents of the viewpoint, may also claim that success never depends upon grades and the rule of success is hard work and destiny of course. This might also be true with a one eyed view. However, I think success is about all talents and abilities that requires study in academic institutions. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that, there is a range of conflicting arguments opposing and supporting the viewpoint, I am fully convinced that university degree is essential to become successful in life.
The assertion that
university
degree
is a mandatory to have a
successful
life seems to me constitutes a fundamental misunderstanding among
people
. Whether to
agree
it or not is a
thought provoking
question.
Personally
, I, like
many
others, tend to
totally
agree
the viewpoint that without
university
education become
successful
is
nearly
impossible.

The opponents of the argument,
clearly
put the point forward that there are
many
examples of
successful
people
around the world who did not completed
university
education and
still
became
successful
most
famously
Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg and Steve Jobs. Their argument do have
some
justification and might be right to
some
extent.
However
, the reality is quite
different
and these
people
are
some
exceptional examples which cannot be
used
as general
rule
.
On the other hand
, there are millions of examples of
successful
university
graduates who have
been succeeded
because
of their
academic
credentials. Even Bill Gates, Zuckerberg and
Steve jobs
had the similar level of programming
skills
as a
university
graduate.

Again, those who believe that
academic
degree
is not mandatory to be
successful
in life
usually
mention that prosperity does not depend on
academic
qualifications
but
upon opportunities. This statement
also
may be true.
But
, I
think
opportunity does not
come
to all and bright
academic
background is a giant leap towards opportunities.
Moreover
, a
University
is not
only
a place of acquiring
academic
degree
but
also
a place to learn
so
many
things that
help
us to become more rounded as human being which is
also
an indispensable criterion of success.

Apart from the above mentioned reasons, the opponents of the viewpoint, may
also
claim that success never depends upon grades and the
rule
of success is
hard
work and destiny
of course
. This might
also
be true with a one eyed view.
However
, I
think
success is about all talents and abilities that requires study in
academic
institutions.

In conclusion
,
in spite of
the fact that, there is a range of conflicting arguments opposing and supporting the viewpoint, I am
fully
convinced that
university
degree
is essential to become
successful
in life.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that to have a successful life you have to have University education, while others think it’s not that important, v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
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