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do you agree or disagree with the statement? the ability to maintain friendship with small group of people is more important than ability to making new friends. v.26

the ability to maintain friendship with small group of people is more important than ability to making new friends. v. 26
In today' s progressive world, friends play a very crucial role in individual' s life. No one can turn a blind eye to their enormous effects on one' s way of living. There is a heated debate which some people believe that maintaining friendships with a small number of friends over a long period is more important for happiness that making new friends easily. I firmly support this statement, and in what follows I will aptly substantiate my point of view. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that friendships which are maintained for a long period benefit from a higher level of loyalty, and people usually enjoy being with their loyal friends since they are more trustworthy. It goes without saying that loyalty is something that forms with the passing of time and cannot be expected to happen in a blink of an eye. Hence, older friends whose friendships have been created over a long period of time are more likely to be faithful to their close friends. Consequently, benefiting from several faithful friends around, chances of betrayal are reduced and one can enjoy his friendships more easily. Take my personal experience as an example. When I was in university, I had an old friend called Jack. Whenever I was going through difficulties with a different matters during my university life, it was always him who came in to the picture and helped me overcome those hardships, especially financial ones, and never turned his back on me. This indicates that older friendships bring more loyalty to the relationship. Another point to be considered is the fact that friends whose friendships have been maintained for a long time are quite familiar with each other, allowing them to easily have fun and make each other happy in different occasions. Needless to say, when some people spend a great deal of time with each other in several years, they discover various aspects of their friends' personality and get to know their pros and cons very well. Therefore, they are well aware of old friends' favorites and can readily make them laugh, and consequently have great time with each other which, without any doubt, will bring memorable happiness to the relationship. For instance, Reza and I have been friends for almost 6 years; therefore, we definitely know what present to get for different occasions for each other, enabling us to make each other happy without putting any thought on that. This illustrates that old friendships provide people with more familiarity and subsequently more happiness. To sum up, the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of friends over a long period is more important than the ability to make new friends easily due to aforementioned reasons. Thus, I advise people to take care of relationships with older friends if happiness is desired.
In
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today&
#039; s progressive world,
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friends
play a
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very
crucial role in
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individual&
#039; s life. No one can turn a blind eye to their enormous effects on
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one&
#039; s way of living. There is a heated debate which
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some
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people
believe that maintaining
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friendships
with a
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small
number of
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friends
over a
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long
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period
is more
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important
for happiness that making new
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friends
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easily
. I
firmly
support this statement, and in what follows I will
aptly
substantiate my point of view.

The
first
exquisite point to
be mentioned
is that
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friendships
which
are maintained
for a
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long
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period
benefit from a higher level of loyalty, and
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people
usually
enjoy being with their loyal
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friends
since they are more trustworthy. It goes without saying that loyalty is something that forms with the passing of
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time
and cannot be
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expected
to happen in a blink of an eye.
Hence
, older
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friends
whose
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friendships
have
been created
over a
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long
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period
of
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time
are more likely to be faithful to their close
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friends
.
Consequently
, benefiting from several faithful
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friends
around, chances of betrayal are
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reduced
and one can enjoy his
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friendships
more
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easily
. Take my personal experience as an example. When I was in university, I had an
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old
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friend
called Jack. Whenever I was going through difficulties with a
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different
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matters
during my university life, it was always him who came in to the picture and
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helped
me overcome those hardships,
especially
financial ones, and never turned his back on me. This indicates that older
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friendships
bring more loyalty to the relationship.

Another point to
be considered
is the fact that
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friends
whose
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friendships
have
been maintained
for a
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long
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time
are quite familiar with each
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other
, allowing them to
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easily
have fun and
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make
each
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other
happy in
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different
occasions. Needless to say, when
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some
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people
spend a great deal of
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time
with each
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other
in several years, they discover various aspects of their
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friends&
#039; personality and
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get
to know their pros and cons
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very
well.
Therefore
, they are well aware of
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old
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friends&
#039; favorites and can
readily
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make
them laugh, and
consequently
have great
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time
with each
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other
which, without any doubt, will bring memorable happiness to the relationship.
For instance
, Reza and I have been
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friends
for almost 6 years;
therefore
, we definitely know what present to
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get
for
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different
occasions for each
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other
, enabling us to
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make
each
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other
happy without putting any
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thought
on that. This illustrates that
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old
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friendships
provide
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people
with more familiarity and
subsequently
more happiness.

To sum up, the ability to maintain
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friendships
with a
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small
number of
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friends
over a
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long
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period
is more
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important
than the ability to
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make
new
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friends
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easily
due to aforementioned reasons.
Thus
, I advise
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people
to take care of relationships with older
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friends
if happiness
is desired
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay the ability to maintain friendship with small group of people is more important than ability to making new friends. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
471 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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