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Some people think that they can learn better bu themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay v.2

Some people think that they can learn better bu themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay v. 2
Nowadays and with the availability of information on the internet, Some think that learning by themselves is much affective and better that paying for school classes or hiring a teacher. I strongly believe that teachers have an important role to play in the leaning process, and that they were an still are indispensable. Firstly, teachers are more experienced than us, they spend years improving their teaching skills along with their knowledge. therefore they already know to present the ideas so that students wouldn’t find difficulties. they also have an overview of the subject they are teaching, in other words they are more familiar with the parts or lessons that are easy and the ones that might be hard to understand for a student. As a result, teacher make it easier for the student to learn since they already have the basics required to provide a much better experience to their students. Secondly, teachers have access to great resources of information. While learning new things we usually need to have access to a lot of books and articles for basic information also for practice. Some of these books and articles are expensive, others are old are could not be found in libraries anymore. Hence, with the help of a teacher you can have access to these resources for free. For example when I was a student in the university, all the teachers used to give us copies of certain passages of some really expensive books that we could not afford to buy or were not available in our country. There was this one teacher who even let us borrow valuable books from him to help us with our schools projects. Lastly, Communication is really crucial while learning, therefore the presence of a teacher that can answer your questions or discuss ideas with you is very important. When studying alone sometimes we come across some difficulties that can affect the process of learning. Some lessons are chained to others, therefore ignoring some parts can have negative effect on the students. By accumulating a none understood parts of lessons it becomes like a snowball, the bigger it gets the more dangerous. So having a teacher at your disposal is very handy. They can answer you immediately or in some case they can get back to you with the right answer the next time they see you. All things considered, having a teacher at your disposal can make the learning process easier and enjoyable. Teachers are an important and valuable source of information that can not be replaced.
Nowadays and with the availability of
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information
on the internet,
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Some
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think
that
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learning
by themselves is much affective and better that paying for school classes or hiring a
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teacher
. I
strongly
believe that
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teachers
have an
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important
role to play in the leaning process, and that they were
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an
still
are indispensable.

Firstly
,
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teachers
are more experienced than us, they spend years improving their teaching
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skills
along with their knowledge.
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therefore
they already know to present the
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ideas
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so
that
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students
wouldn’t find difficulties.
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they
also
have an overview of the subject they are teaching,
in other words
they are more familiar with the parts or lessons that are easy and the ones that might be
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hard
to understand for a
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student
.
As a result
,
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teacher
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make
it easier for the
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student
to learn since they already have the basics required to provide a much better experience to their students.

Secondly
,
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teachers
have access to great resources of
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information
. While
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learning
new things we
usually
need to have access to
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a lot of
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books
and articles for basic
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information
also
for practice.
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Some
of these
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books
and articles are expensive, others are
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old
are could not
be found
in libraries anymore.
Hence
, with the
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help
of a
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teacher
you can have access to these resources for free.
For example
when I was a
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student
in the university, all the
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teachers
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used
to give us copies of certain passages of
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some
really
expensive
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books
that we could not afford to
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buy
or were not available in our country. There was this one
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teacher
who even
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let
us borrow valuable
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books
from him to
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help
us with our schools projects.

Lastly
, Communication is
really
crucial while
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learning
,
therefore
the presence of a
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teacher
that can answer your questions or discuss
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ideas
with you is
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very
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important
.
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studying alone
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sometimes
we
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come
across
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some
difficulties that can affect the process of
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learning
.
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Some
lessons
are chained
to others,
therefore
ignoring
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some
parts can have
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negative
effect on the
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students
. By accumulating a none understood parts of lessons it becomes like a snowball, the bigger it
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gets
the more
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dangerous
.
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So
having a
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teacher
at your disposal is
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very
handy. They can answer you immediately or in
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some
case they can
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get
back to you with the right answer the
next
time they
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see
you.

All things considered, having a
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teacher
at your disposal can
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make
the
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learning
process easier and enjoyable.
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Teachers
are an
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important
and valuable source of
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information
that can not
be replaced
.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people think that they can learn better bu themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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