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Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which one do you prefer? v.6

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which one do you prefer? v. 6
Learning is a life-long process and knowledge makes us the supreme being. A popular stratum of the society tends to opine that people can learn effectively on their own rather than learning from teachers, while others oppose this view. They reckon teachers are helpful for learning. I will discuss both views before forming my opinion. On the one hand, people in favour of self-learning think that when people learn by themselves, it becomes more appealing and hence the brain catches it more efficiently. Moreover, learning from someone's own experience by facing challenges is the best way to learn. Moving further, when a person tries to learn something new on his own, he does not feel any pressure unlike in a scheduled routine with lecturers. Finally, academicians often have limited knowledge and share biased views and personal opinions with students. This could mislead people to learn in a bad way. Great people like Michael Faraday and Thomas Edison were self-educated and they have changed the world. On the other hand, those who opine that instructors are more important in learning believe that teachers have the ability to inculcate proper knowledge because they have professional experience and subject-specific expertise. They not only teach, they motivate pupils and explain complex issues in a simpler method. What is more, without instructors, pupils cannot gain practical skills. For instance, in chemistry and physics, it is stiff for all students to observe data of a process and teachers are must in learning such subjects. I personally believe that teachers have great roles in educating us and we cannot become tutored on our own. No doubt self-learning is helpful at a certain level in life, but the function teachers perform in our academic life is unreplaceable. To conclude, our teachers not only teach us academic lessons but also inspire us, help us gain practical skill and this is why having teachers in our learning process in a must.
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is a life-long process and knowledge
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makes
us the supreme being. A popular stratum of the society tends to opine that
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people
can
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learn
effectively
on their
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own
rather
than
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learning
from
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teachers
, while others oppose this view. They reckon
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teachers
are helpful for
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learning
. I will discuss both views
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before
forming my opinion.

On the one hand,
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people
in
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favour
of self-learning
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think
that when
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people
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learn
by themselves, it becomes more appealing and
hence
the brain catches it more
efficiently
.
Moreover
,
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learning
from someone's
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own
experience by facing challenges is the best way to
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learn
. Moving
further
, when a person tries to
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learn
something new on his
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own
, he does not feel any pressure unlike in a scheduled routine with lecturers.
Finally
, academicians
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often
have limited knowledge and share biased views and personal opinions with students. This could mislead
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people
to
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learn
in a
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bad
way. Great
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people
like Michael Faraday and Thomas Edison were
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self-educated and
they have
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changed
the world.

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, those who opine that instructors are more
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important
in
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learning
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believe
that
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teachers
have the ability to inculcate proper knowledge
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because
they have professional experience and subject-specific expertise. They not
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only
teach, they motivate pupils and
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explain
complex issues in a simpler method.
What is more
, without instructors, pupils cannot gain practical
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skills
.
For instance
, in chemistry and physics, it is stiff for all students to observe data of a process and
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teachers
are
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must
in
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learning
such subjects. I
personally
believe that
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teachers
have great roles in educating
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us and
we cannot become tutored on our
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own
. No doubt self-learning is helpful at a certain level in life,
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but
the function
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teachers
perform in our academic life is
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unreplaceable
.

To conclude
, our
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teachers
not
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only
teach us academic lessons
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but
also
inspire us,
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help
us gain practical
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skill
and this is why having
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teachers
in our
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learning
process in a
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must
.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which one do you prefer? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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