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Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or negative development? v.1

Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or negative development? v. 1
There are more and more big cities in the world as a feature of modern times. Despite the various benefits the cities can provide, the life quality suffers under a diverse set of environmental and social issues. In this essay, the most prevalent reasons and solutions will be discussed. One of the most critical causes of the shattering quality is the worsening of the city dwellers' health due to various environmental pollutants. The smog in the world capitals and other high-density urban areas such as Shanghai and Los Angels has become unbearable for their inhabitants. The other often mentioned cause is intensified crime events. For that reason, people are living under constant fear and threat; leaving them prone to stress-related diseases and higher probabilities of falling victims of crimes. For instance, in some Latin America's biggest cities, it is not recommended for women to walk alone in the streets even during the daylight. For the problems, there are always solutions. Referring back to the pollution problem, the cure has been declared mainly by the means of cleaner energy and transportation systems. Many so-called 'green cities' like Singapore are leading the way in the development of higher quality public transports and prioritizing the light vehicle traffic. Dealing with crimes is far more complicated. Psychologists believe that a more beautiful, clean and happy external environment can reduce crime levels. Thus, this can be something city planners should look into more deeply when planning our urban areas. But most likely, providing people a sufficient amount of opportunities and guidance in their lives would be the most effective prevention measure as far as I believe. To conclude, many adversities can reduce urban life quality such as environmental pollution and crime; however, there are also opportunities and tools to reduce these effects.
There are more and more
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big
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cities
in the world as a feature of modern times. Despite the various benefits the
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cities
can provide, the life
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quality
suffers under a diverse set of environmental and social issues. In this essay, the most prevalent reasons and solutions will
be discussed
.

One of the most critical causes of the shattering
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quality
is the worsening of the city dwellers' health due to various environmental pollutants. The smog in the world capitals and other high-density urban areas such as Shanghai and
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Los Angels
has become unbearable for their inhabitants. The other
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often
mentioned cause
is intensified
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crime
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events
. For that reason,
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people
are living under constant fear and threat; leaving them prone to
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stress
-related diseases and higher probabilities of falling victims of
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crimes
.
For instance
, in
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some
Latin America's biggest
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cities
, it is not recommended for women to walk alone in the streets even during the daylight.

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For
the problems, there are always solutions. Referring back to the pollution problem, the cure has
been declared
mainly
by the means of cleaner energy and transportation systems.
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Many
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so
-called 'green cities' like Singapore are leading the way in the development of higher
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quality
public transports and prioritizing the light vehicle traffic.

Dealing with
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crimes
is far more complicated. Psychologists believe that a more
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beautiful
, clean and happy external environment can
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reduce
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crime
levels.
Thus
, this can be something city planners should look into more
deeply
when planning our urban areas.
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But
most likely, providing
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people
a sufficient amount of opportunities and guidance in their
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lives
would be the most effective prevention measure as far as I believe.

To conclude
,
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many
adversities can
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reduce
urban life
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quality
such as environmental pollution and
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crime
;
however
, there are
also
opportunities and tools to
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reduce
these effects.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future. Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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