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Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. v. 2
Governments, police and legislators have long sought ways to decrease crime. There has been a heated debate on whether criminals ought to be sentenced at a longer period or be tackled by other alternative methods. Both viewpoints will be elaborated in this essay and explain why I feel treatment and education programs are vital to curb crime. It is commonly believed that incarceration, particularly extended periods, is a powerful way to deter criminality. The rationale is that potential offenders would consider the consequence more thoroughly before committing crimes if the punishments are severer. Although this argument is true to some degree, the effects are not significant in the long term. Extending the incarceration period but without solving the fundamental issues, such as addition or poverty, may result in higher re-offending rates. Many offenders return to jail after being released as they do not have the skills to survive in society, and therefore, have no options but to commit crimes. In contrast, if more treatments and education or vocation training are provided in prisons, the re-offending rates can be reduced dramatically. For instance, a rehabilitation program should be introduced in prison to support those drug addicts or alcoholics to quit those habits and rebuild confidence and establish coping strategies. In addition, education programs and employment training which can enhance prisoners employability are also vital in assisting those people to build up life skills for returning to communities. Without them, released prisoners are bound to end up in jail again. In my view, even though imprisonment is still necessary in order to protect society from dangerous people. I believe that only by supporting prisoners overcome their defects and acquiring sufficient knowledge can a person become a law-abiding citizen after probation. In conclusion, despite the fact that longer jail terms may seem to be a deterrent to crime, introducing rehabilitation and training to support those offenders to regain life skills are more effective in reducing criminal activities.
Governments
, police and legislators have long sought ways to decrease crime. There has been a heated debate on whether criminals ought to
be sentenced
at a longer period or
be tackled
by other alternative methods. Both viewpoints will
be elaborated
in this essay and
explain
why I feel treatment and education programs are vital to curb crime.

It is
commonly
believed that incarceration,
particularly
extended periods, is a powerful way to deter criminality. The rationale is that potential offenders would consider the consequence more
thoroughly
before
committing crimes if the punishments are severer. Although this argument is true to
some
degree, the effects are not significant in the long term. Extending the incarceration period
but
without solving the fundamental issues, such as addition or poverty, may result in higher re-offending rates.
Many
offenders return to jail after
being released
as they do not have the
skills
to survive in society, and
therefore
, have no options
but
to commit crimes.

In contrast
, if more treatments and education or vocation training
are provided
in prisons, the re-offending rates can be
reduced
dramatically
.
For instance
, a rehabilitation program should
be introduced
in prison to support those drug addicts or alcoholics to quit those habits and rebuild confidence and establish coping strategies.
In addition
, education programs and employment training which can enhance prisoners employability are
also
vital in assisting those
people
to build up life
skills
for returning to communities. Without them, released prisoners
are bound
to
end
up in jail again.

In my view,
even though
imprisonment is
still
necessary in order to protect society from
dangerous
people
. I believe that
only
by supporting prisoners overcome their defects and acquiring sufficient knowledge can a person become a law-abiding citizen after probation.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that longer jail terms may seem to be a deterrent to crime, introducing rehabilitation and training to support those offenders to regain life
skills
are more effective in reducing criminal activities.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime while others believe that there are alternative ways to decrease crime. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
324 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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