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Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. v. 9
Well, a numebr of people thinking like teenage which give much happiness than the adult in kind of more responsibilities. According to me, I am partially agree to this statement. Because, the people in the age of 15-25 they don't have probably much responsibilities so they can live their life more happily as well as in very relaxation mode. On the other hand, when we reach the age of adult session we are in the position of good decision maker and we reanalyze the things and live more happily also. So finally, I conclude that it depending on their needs and interests to live much happily and their own individuality. Thanks and regards Yours sincerelyPraveen.
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thinking like teenage which give much happiness than the adult in kind of more responsibilities.
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, I am
partially
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in the age of 15-25 they don't have
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much
responsibilities
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they can
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live
their life more
happily
as well
as in
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very
relaxation mode.

On the other hand
, when we reach the age of adult session we are in the position of
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good
decision
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maker and
we reanalyze the things and
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live
more
happily
also
.

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So
finally
, I conclude that
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it depending
on their needs and interests to
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live
much
happily
and their
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own
individuality.

Thanks and regards

Yours
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sincerelyPraveen
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IELTS essay Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. v. 1

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