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Some people think that the public libraries are no longer important while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion? v.1

Some people think that the public libraries are no longer important while others disagree. v. 1
It is often said that we are fortunate to have multiple choices in this modern world. It can be about anything starting from Apparels to medication. In paragraphs to come, I will discuss various statements of my opinion and will conclude whether I agree or disagree about the topic. Firstly, Pupil do understand that we have the option to choose between various available alternatives. Hence the world has become more complex in the recent century. In my opinion, It is obvious that as a human being we have evolved so much, One of the such thing's our lifestyle has improved a lot. Secondly, Premature birth and average living age have increased. For example: when a person was sick a century ago, he or she didn't have several ways to detect what's happening in his body and had to simply get the locally available medicine. But now if a human has a problem with his health then they have ample number of options to seek medical support from all over the planet and disease can be diagnosed at the earliest and the person's life can be saved. There could quite a few people who would disagree that they have fewer choices in recent years, this could be possible only if they are from a country where human rights are restricted. Still, I wonder if there would be any person disagree with the fact that we live a world where there are endless opportunities. To Conclude, I would like to state that Options are endless in this modern era where everyday innovative minds comes up with different choices in each area.
It is
often
said that we are fortunate to have multiple choices in this modern world. It can be about anything starting from Apparels to medication. In paragraphs to
come
, I will discuss various statements of my opinion and will conclude whether I
agree
or disagree about the topic.

Firstly
, Pupil do understand that we have the option to choose between various available alternatives.
Hence
the world has become more complex in the recent century. In my opinion, It is obvious that as a human being we have evolved
so
much, One of the such thing's our lifestyle has
improved
a lot.
Secondly
, Premature birth and average living age have increased.
For example
: when a person was sick a century ago, he or she didn't have several ways to detect what's happening in his body and had to
simply
get
the
locally
available medicine.
But
now
if a human has a problem with his health then they have ample number of options to seek medical support from all over the planet and disease can
be diagnosed
at the earliest and the person's life can
be saved
.

There could quite a few
people
who would disagree that they have fewer choices in recent years, this could be possible
only
if they are from a country where human rights
are restricted
.

Still
, I wonder if there would be any person
disagree with the fact that
we
live
a world where there are endless opportunities.

To Conclude
, I would like to state that Options are endless in this modern era where everyday innovative minds
comes
up with
different
choices in each area.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the public libraries are no longer important while others disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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