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Some people consider public libraries to be unnecessary due to the availability of information on the internet. Others, however, believe that libraries can still play an important role in society. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people consider public libraries to be unnecessary due to the availability of information on the internet. Others, however, believe that libraries can still play an important role in society. v. 1
No one would deny that with the high accessibility of the internet, libraries have been given less importance in society, compared to the past. While some people believe that the public libraries are no longer essential because of the internet, I believe that libraries still make a positive contribution in our societies. On the one hand, the Internet enables the users to obtain a wide range of information regardless of their locations. People would not travel to a local library in order to read books or any other reading materials as they have access to the information via web research. For example, if an individual inserts few keywords on the websites, he will be given a rich variety of the related information from all over the world within a minute. Therefore, using the internet for acquiring information may cause a situation where visiting libraries seem to have no necessity for the Internet users. Nevertheless, I do believe that the existence of libraries in society should not be able to regard as pointless. A library is much more than a means of distribution of the information; it also has a vital role in a whole community through different sorts of workshops. Those arranged classes may become a key to tackling some social problems. To take Denmark as example, the public libraries have held several community activities, such as computer teaching sessions for the old to lesson the generation gap in using technology devices and the recruitment resources center for job-seekers to curtail unemployment rates. By having libraries, people will continuously acquire a variety of information, which benefits the society. To recapitulate, even though it is preferable for the public to use the Internet for the rapid acquisition of information instead of libraries, I believe that libraries possess more benefits not only for users but also for a society.
No one would deny that with the high accessibility of the internet, libraries have been
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given
less importance in society, compared to the past. While
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some
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people
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believe
that the public libraries are no longer essential
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because
of the internet, I
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believe
that libraries
still
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make
a
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positive
contribution in our societies.

On the one hand, the Internet enables the users to obtain a wide range of
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information
regardless of their locations.
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People
would not travel to a local library in order to read books or any other reading materials as they have access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
via web research.
For example
, if an individual inserts few keywords on the websites, he will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a rich variety of the related
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
from all over the world within a minute.
Therefore
, using the internet for acquiring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
may cause a situation where visiting libraries seem to have no necessity for the Internet users.

Nevertheless
, I do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that the existence of libraries in society should not be able to regard as pointless. A library is much more than a means of distribution of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
; it
also
has a vital role in a whole community through
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
sorts of workshops. Those arranged classes may become a key to tackling
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
social problems. To take Denmark as example, the public libraries have held several community activities, such as computer teaching sessions for the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
to lesson the generation gap in using technology devices and the recruitment resources center for job-seekers to curtail unemployment rates. By having libraries,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
continuously
acquire a variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
, which benefits the society.

To recapitulate,
even though
it is preferable for the public to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the Internet for the rapid acquisition of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
instead
of libraries, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that libraries possess more benefits not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for users
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
for a society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people consider public libraries to be unnecessary due to the availability of information on the internet. Others, however, believe that libraries can still play an important role in society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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