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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and get a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

Nowadays it is easy to apply for and get a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
In many cities, day by day the housing requirement is increasing rapidly due to the high rise of population. However, there is not enough space in major cities, and the outskirts are the only option available to build new homes. Nonetheless, many people are arguing that the countryside and its beauty should be protected, and new buildings should not be built. Yet, I think people should consider building a new property in the countryside. Undoubtedly, everyone tries to choose urban areas for their living space for many reasons. Firstly, it is convenient to live in those areas. For instance, they have all the amenities a few minutes away. Secondly, the travel time to workplaces reduces drastically, allowing them to use the time efficiently. However, there are not enough spaces for people to build their houses. Nevertheless, the countryside provides peaceful living space for citizens with many benefits. The cost of land and labour is cheaper than that in cities. Since the air is cleaner and the areas are not congested as in cities, residents will surely enjoy living in such areas. The lush green and cleaner environment indeed will attract more people to villages allowing them to get away from the fast-moving pace and heavy traffic. Furthermore, the government should encourage people to move to regional areas. The state should build new infrastructure such as highways leading to cities, better public transportation, good schools and excellent healthcare facilities without destroying nature. The hesitation among the public will fly away once these facilities are implemented in regional areas. In conclusion, I think it is vital that the state considers in providing better infrastructure facilities in rural areas without destroying the environment and its natural beauty, allowing people to move and build their homes.
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due to the high rise of population.
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, there is not
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enough
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space
in major
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cities
, and the outskirts are the
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only
option available to
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build
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new
homes. Nonetheless,
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many
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people
are arguing that the countryside and its beauty should
be protected
, and
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new
buildings should not
be built
.
Yet
, I
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think
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people
should consider building a
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new
property in the countryside.

Undoubtedly
, everyone tries to choose urban
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areas
for their living
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space
for
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many
reasons.
Firstly
, it is convenient to
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live
in those
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areas
.
For instance
, they have all the amenities a few minutes away.
Secondly
, the travel time to workplaces
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reduces
drastically
, allowing them to
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use
the time
efficiently
.
However
, there are not
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enough
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spaces
for
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to
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build
their
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houses
.

Nevertheless
, the countryside provides peaceful living
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space
for citizens with
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benefits. The cost of land and
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labour
is cheaper than that in
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cities
. Since the air is cleaner and the
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areas
are not congested as in
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cities
, residents will
surely
enjoy living in such
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areas
. The lush green and cleaner environment
indeed
will attract more
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people
to villages allowing them to
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get
away from the
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fast
-moving pace and heavy traffic.

Furthermore
, the
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government
should encourage
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people
to
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move
to regional
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areas
. The state should
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build
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new
infrastructure such as highways leading to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
, better public transportation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
schools and excellent healthcare facilities without destroying nature. The hesitation among the public will
fly
away once these facilities
are implemented
in regional areas.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is vital that the state considers in providing better infrastructure facilities in rural
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areas
without destroying the environment and its natural beauty, allowing
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
and
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build
their homes.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays it is easy to apply for and get a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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