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Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people s lives in negative ways Others disagree and say that they have been more positive Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people s lives in negative ways Others disagree and say that they have been more positive 1
For many people, news is an inseparable part of their lives. An issue in dispute is whether the impacts of news media on humans’ lives denote a negative development. Although some people may confess its beneficial effects, others do not take the same position. Both sides will be elaborated in this essay. The spread of the news from various media including radio, television, and the Internet has had potential advantages on people as well as the societies. Needless to say that collecting information from the news definitely promotes the people’s awareness. Political and economic programs broadcasted from the mass media make people able to understand what is going on around the world. For people holding authorities, accessing to the internet-based media opens up an opportunity to study the opinions of people who regularly leave their viewpoints on public forums. An in-depth evaluation of the comments enhances the officials’ decision-making ability on the issues that may occur in their territories too. Furthermore, for business people, tracing current status of the global market helps them have a realistic prospect towards impending changes, leading them to prevent any costly loss of their companies. Turning to the other side of the argument, propagation of the news can influence people’s lives in a negative way. Some media may exaggerate the magnitude of the real threats in the world, like terrorists’ attacks or prevalence of some dangerous diseases, intentionally to just gain higher audience ratings. Others may spread fake news to disturb peoples’ minds and mislead them. Moreover, some news channels may try to inculcate their own point of views to the peoples’ mind, encouraging them to think in a way in favor of their policy. Weighing all the aforementioned arguments, I can conclude that having access to the news from various media is more beneficial for both people and the societies. To overcome the harmful sides, the authorities can have a close surveillance, controlling the spread of the disturbing information.
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,
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news
is an inseparable part of their
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lives
. An issue in dispute is whether the impacts of
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news
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media
on humans’
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lives
denote a
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negative
development. Although
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some
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people
may confess its beneficial effects, others do not take the same position. Both sides will
be elaborated
in this essay.

The spread of the
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news
from various
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media
including radio, television, and the Internet has had potential advantages on
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people
as well
as the societies. Needless to say that collecting information from the
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news
definitely promotes the
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people’s
awareness. Political and economic programs broadcasted from the mass
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media
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make
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people
able to understand what is going on around the world. For
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people
holding authorities, accessing to the internet-based
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media
opens up an opportunity to study the opinions of
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people
who
regularly
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leave
their viewpoints on public forums. An in-depth evaluation of the comments enhances the officials’ decision-making ability on the issues that may occur in their territories too.
Furthermore
, for business
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people
, tracing
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current
status of the global market
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helps
them have a realistic prospect towards impending
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changes
, leading them to
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prevent
any costly loss of their
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companies
.

Turning to the other side of the argument, propagation of the
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news
can influence
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people’s
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lives
in a
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negative
way.
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Some
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media
may exaggerate the magnitude of the real threats in the world, like terrorists’ attacks or prevalence of
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some
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dangerous
diseases,
intentionally
to
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just
gain higher audience ratings. Others may spread fake
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news
to disturb
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peoples’
minds and mislead them.
Moreover
,
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some
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news
channels may try to inculcate their
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own
point of views to the
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peoples’
mind, encouraging them to
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think
in a way in favor of their policy.

Weighing all the aforementioned arguments, I can conclude that having access to the
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news
from various
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media
is more beneficial for both
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people
and the societies. To overcome the harmful sides, the authorities can have a close surveillance, controlling the spread of the disturbing information.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people s lives in negative ways Others disagree and say that they have been more positive 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
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