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News plays an important part of most people's lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v.3

News plays an important part of most people's lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 3
News touches our lives in profound ways, the reason being since it is the ideal medium to keep people aware and informed, however, a lot of it is dedicated to negative stories, which could be attributed to human psychology and perceived ratings benefits. In my opinion, there is a great need to put more emphasis on positive news instead. News plays a critical role in our day to day lives, as it helps people stay informed and abreast of the events and happenings around their neck of the woods and globally as well. It could be life saving and crucial to the well being of people in times of natural disasters and extreme weather events, advising residents if they are in harms way, and consequently, allowing them to plan their evacuation to safer areas. In addition, most importantly, it helps communicate the Governments promulgations to its citizens. The majority of news seems to be focussed on negative stories and this is related to how humans are wired. In other words, research has shown that human brains are more excited about and interested in bad news than good one, which explains why there is a predominance of negative news items. Furthermore, people who are in charge of deciding what is put out in newsrooms, make the decision to allow more bad news to be broadcast as they consider it to raise veiwership of the channel. I strongly believe that newsrooms ought to focus and emphasis on broadcasting positive and uplifting stories. They should showcase local heroes and people who demonstrate acts of kindness, generosity and best moral behaviour, even in the face of adversity for the greater good of the community. In addition, news should focus more on telling inspiring stories from around the world, which will encourage their viewers to be and give their best and support their localities and regions and as a result, lead to a positive change in nations across the globe.
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in profound ways, the reason being since it is the ideal medium to
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keep
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people
aware and informed,
however
,
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a lot of
it
is dedicated
to
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negative
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stories
, which could
be attributed
to human psychology and perceived ratings benefits. In my opinion, there is a great need to put more emphasis on
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positive
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news
instead
.

News plays a critical role in our
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day to day
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lives
, as it
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helps
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people
stay informed and abreast of the
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events
and happenings around their neck of the woods and globally
as well
. It could be life saving and crucial to the
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well being
of
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people
in times of natural disasters and extreme weather
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events
, advising residents if they are in harms way, and
consequently
, allowing them to plan their evacuation to safer areas.
In addition
, most
importantly
, it
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helps
communicate the
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Governments
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promulgations
to its citizens.

The majority of
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news
seems to
be focussed
on
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negative
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stories
and this
is related
to how humans
are wired
.
In other words
, research has shown that human brains are more excited about and interested in
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bad
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news
than
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good
one, which
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explains
why there is a predominance of
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negative
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news
items.
Furthermore
,
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people
who are in charge of deciding what
is put
out in newsrooms,
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make
the decision to
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allow
more
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bad
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news
to be broadcast as they consider it to raise
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veiwership
of the channel.

I
strongly
believe that newsrooms ought to focus and emphasis on broadcasting
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positive
and uplifting
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stories
. They should showcase local heroes and
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people
who demonstrate acts of kindness, generosity and best moral
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behaviour
, even in the face of adversity for the greater
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good
of the community.
In addition
,
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news
should focus more on telling inspiring
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stories
from around the world, which will encourage their viewers to be and give their best and support their localities and regions and
as a result
, lead to a
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positive
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change
in nations across the globe.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay News plays an important part of most people's lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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