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People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? what are the effects on them? v.4

People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? what are the effects on them? v. 4
Nowadays, due to busy lifestyle it is common phenomenon for people to slumber less. This essay will discuss both views and finish with a reasoned opinion Firstly, people nap less is because of a hectic lifestyle. People have a busier life than in past. Secondly, is the fast pace life which may adherents are subject to causing myriad problems. Thirdly, such as my mother used to sleep 9 hours a night and she was a housewife. I snooze only 6 hour and I am a busy doctor in conclusion. We all have busier lifestyle then in the past so we do not sleep as much causing humongous problem. There are plethora reasons for this predicament. Firstly, productivity of the workforce will plummet, However, this is something that can be mitigate. Secondly, this could cause health problem for those affected, Finally, a number of my patient have complained of this problem and this was caused by lack of does. To sum up, reasons are multivaried and profound which is not surprising considered how wide-spread this problem is. To sum it all up, we live in fast paced hectic world where drowsing is not privatisation. It is my future prediction that this will continue to be problem and will even gather pace in the coming century.
Nowadays, due to busy lifestyle it
is common
phenomenon for
people
to slumber less. This essay will discuss both views and finish with a reasoned
opinion


Firstly
,
people
nap less is
because
of a hectic lifestyle.
People
have a busier life than
in past
.
Secondly
, is the
fast
pace life which may adherents are subject to causing myriad
problems
.
Thirdly
, such as my mother
used
to sleep 9 hours a
night and
she was a housewife. I snooze
only
6
hour and
I am a busy doctor
in conclusion
. We all have busier lifestyle then in the past
so
we do not sleep as much causing humongous problem.

There are plethora reasons for this predicament.
Firstly
, productivity of the workforce will plummet,
However
, this is something that can be
mitigate
.
Secondly
, this could cause health
problem
for those
affected
,
Finally
, a number of my patient have complained of this
problem
and this
was caused
by lack of does. To sum up, reasons are
multivaried
and profound which is not surprising considered how wide-spread this
problem
is.

To sum it all up, we
live
in
fast
paced hectic world where drowsing is not
privatisation
. It is my future prediction that this will continue to be
problem
and will even gather pace in the coming century.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? what are the effects on them? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
214 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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