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Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable while others think it is making them less sociable Discuss both the views and give your opinion v.2

Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable while others think it is making them less sociable 2
Nowadays, technology has impacted us in all the walks of life. There is hardly any area where the technology has not shown its magic. This profounding change can be seen in the way people connect in the world today. There are some people who assert that the technology has made people more sociable, whereas some hold a dissenting opinion. On the one hand, there are people who agree that the technology has overhauled the way people connect nowadays. There are a number of applications which are available to connect which has made it easier for people to connect with the other person. For instance, the social networking giant Facebook every day helps at least 5 Billion people connect daily. This type of connectivity is enabling us to connect to new and more people in a click of the button. Therefore, it is rightly said that with the advent of modern technology the people today are more sociable than the old times. On the other hand, there are people who call for the modern technology as an evil which is making people less sociable. There is no doubt that the face to face interaction between people is less or dropped to a new low and the modern technology is to be blamed for the said cause. The people are only using the modern means to be connected to others and as a result, it is making them less sociable. To cite an example, in a study conducted by the University of Boston where it had asked respondents about the preferred modes of connecting to their loved ones and 92% people had stated to just connect with them over the social network or video call them to know how they are doing. Thus, this clearly demonstrates that the modern means are making us less sociable. In conclusion, in my opinion, everything comes with the pros and cons and it is up to the user to define it for them. The present generation has been misusing the modern invention to destroy them which should not be done and the people should interact more in person than via technology.
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has impacted us in all the walks of life. There is hardly any area where the
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technology
has not shown its magic. This
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seen
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people
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connect
in the world
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today
. There are
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some
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people
who assert that the
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technology
has made
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people
more
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sociable
, whereas
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some
hold a dissenting opinion.

On the one hand, there are
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people
who
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agree
that the
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technology
has overhauled the way
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people
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connect
nowadays. There are a number of applications which are available to
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connect
which has made it easier for
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people
to
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connect
with the other person.
For instance
, the social networking giant Facebook every day
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helps
at least 5 Billion
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people
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connect
daily. This type of connectivity is enabling us to
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connect
to new and more
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people
in a click of the button.
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, it is
rightly
said that with the advent of
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modern
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technology
the
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people
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today
are more
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sociable
than the
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old
times.

On the other hand
, there are
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people
who call for the
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modern
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technology
as an evil which is making
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people
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less
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sociable
. There is no doubt that the face to face interaction between
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people
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is
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less
or dropped to a new low and the
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modern
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technology
is to
be blamed
for the said cause. The
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people
are
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only
using the
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modern
means to
be connected
to others and
as a result
, it is making them
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less
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sociable
. To cite an example, in a study conducted by the University of Boston where it had asked respondents about the preferred modes of connecting to their
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loved
ones and 92%
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people
had stated to
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just
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connect
with them over the social network or video call them to know how they are doing.
Thus
, this
clearly
demonstrates that the
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modern
means are making us
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less
sociable.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, everything
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comes
with the pros and cons and it is up to the user to define it for them. The present generation has been misusing the
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modern
invention to
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destroy
them which should not
be done
and the
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people
should interact more in person than via
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technology
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the modern technology is making people more sociable while others think it is making them less sociable 2

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