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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. 1

Technology has grown rapidly over-last few years. It uncovered many new ways of communicating with other people around the world. Consequently, it has taken away the physical presence essential in building relations with others in the past. In my opinion, I will discuss how this affects the social lives of individuals. Digital communication advanced exponentially in recent years. It changed the way we communicate and share information with friends, families, and others. Simultaneously, technology bought about possibilities in introducing new people, using social media and other interactive applications like Facebook and Instagram. Isolated people, now get an opportunity to meet like-minded people irrespective of their location. Exchanging of ideas and working together on challenging problems is more fun, with the aid of video calling and messaging over the internet. In recent years, the trend of meeting and chatting with others became a common practice. However, technology did not fill the gap of bringing and building relationships but also taken away face-to-face interactions and trust experience from the past. In other words, people met and interacted with each other regularly. This personal communication is needed in developing very strong relationships that could last for a lifetime. Peoples Trust is also put into jeopardy when meeting new people because of identity issues that are common in the world of the internet. Furthermore, the experience of physically meeting and understanding each other can never be a substitute for modern methods of communication. In conclusion, technology played a vital role in meeting new people from different places at the ease of personal comfort. Moreover, it did not provide a fully equipped solution for building meaningful bonds among people.

IELTS essay Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Technology
has grown
rapidly
over-last few years. It uncovered
many
new
ways of communicating with
other
people
around the world.
Consequently
, it has taken away the physical presence essential in building relations with others in the past. In my opinion, I will discuss how this affects the social
lives
of individuals. Digital communication advanced
exponentially
in recent years. It
changed
the way we communicate and share information with friends, families,
and others
.
Simultaneously
,
technology
bought
about possibilities in introducing
new
people
, using social media and
other
interactive applications like Facebook and Instagram. Isolated
people
,
now
get
an opportunity to
meet
like-minded
people
irrespective of their location. Exchanging of
ideas
and working together on challenging problems is more fun, with the aid of video calling and messaging over the internet. In recent years, the trend of
meeting
and chatting with others became a common practice.
However
,
technology
did not
fill the gap of
bringing and building relationships
but
also
taken away face-to-face interactions and trust experience from the past. In
other
words,
people
met and interacted with each
other
regularly
. This personal communication
is needed
in developing
very
strong relationships that could last for a lifetime.
Peoples
Trust is
also
put into jeopardy when
meeting
new
people
because
of identity issues that are common in the world of the internet.
Furthermore
, the experience of
physically
meeting
and understanding each
other
can never be a substitute for modern methods of communication.
In conclusion
,
technology
played a vital role in
meeting
new
people
from
different
places at the
ease
of personal comfort.
Moreover
, it did not provide a
fully
equipped solution for building meaningful bonds among
people
.
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