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Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views v.3

Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while others think it should be controlled. 3
Many commentators believe that the media possess the right to publicize an individual’s personal life. In contrast, others would argue that this authority should be limited. Both these schools of thought hold valid arguments, which will be discussed before a personal stance being presented. Indisputably, the media such as radio, TV channels, the internet and especially newspapers, are a powerful tool to confront facts and figures associated with celebrities. Exposure of well-known people’s other faces, particularly artists and politicians, can serve the public to comprehend the truth behind their words and performances. Since these facts are brought to light, the public shall have the opportunity to confirm whether celebrities are worthy of supporting or not. For example, the personal lives of political leaders such as Donald Trump can be crucial criteria that reveal how loyal they are to their slogans. On the other hand, opponents may believe that public personalities also have intimate details that must not be interfered with for people to gossip. It is a human right for everyone to have private information kept confidential. Therefore, invading public figures’ privacy shall be against their will, and it shall indeed violate the law of privacy. Besides, in many cases, free publicity of private details may lead to insecurity in their lives as well as have detrimental effects on their career. All things considered, although publishing the personal lives of individuals may have some positive benefits, it also adversely affects the privacy of public figures. Given that, governments and individuals should make a collective effort to impose regulations on the media in order to protect people’s private life.
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commentators believe that the media possess the right to publicize an individual’s
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personal
life.
In contrast
, others would argue that this authority should
be limited
. Both these schools of
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thought
hold valid arguments, which will
be discussed
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before
a
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personal
stance
being presented
.

Indisputably
, the media such as radio, TV channels, the internet and
especially
newspapers, are a powerful tool to confront facts and figures associated with celebrities. Exposure of well-known
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people
’s other faces,
particularly
artists and politicians, can serve the
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public
to comprehend the truth behind their words and performances. Since these facts
are brought
to light, the
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public
shall have the opportunity to confirm whether celebrities are worthy of supporting or not.
For example
, the
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personal
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lives
of political leaders such as Donald Trump can be crucial criteria that reveal how loyal they are to their slogans.

On the other hand
, opponents may believe that
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public
personalities
also
have intimate
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details
that
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must
not
be interfered
with for
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people
to gossip. It is a human right for everyone to have private information
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kept
confidential.
Therefore
, invading
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public
figures’ privacy shall be against their will, and it shall
indeed
violate the law of privacy.
Besides
, in
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many
cases, free publicity of private
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details
may lead to insecurity in their
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lives
as well
as have detrimental effects on their career.

All things considered, although publishing the
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personal
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lives
of individuals may have
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some
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positive
benefits, it
also
adversely
affects the privacy of
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public
figures.
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Given
that,
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governments
and individuals should
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make
a collective effort to impose regulations on the media in order to protect
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people
’s private life.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while others think it should be controlled. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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