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ome people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people's private life while other's think it should be controlled? Discuss both views v.1

ome people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people's private life while other's think it should be controlled? 1
Media plays an important role in everybody's life. Some people argue that print media have the authority to write details about celebrities personal life while others think that it should be controlled. This essay will analyse both views with examples. To start with, Media is a source of information for the common man and they get to know about the various scams with the help of the media. There are many people in the society who do unethical works and take money in term of bribery. If there is no media, then common man would not be able to know about such scams. To illustrate with examples, Lalu Yadav a politician in Bihar state of India, get questioned multiple times by the media for a scam and later get caught by the Police. On the flip side, Media also should not publish celebrities personal photos or stories which they do not want to publish. For instance, It has been seen that media tend to publicize the celebrity marriage or their newborn child photo to get TRP which is completely wrong. Media should be controlled for such kind of events. For example, Deepika and Ranveer, famous celebrities in India, want to keep their marriage personal and do not want any media to publish stories or photos. To conclude, Media is a vital tool for getting information from different cities, states and countries and should continue to publish useful articles which can help people to get familiarize about something. But they should not publish anyone's personal photos just to gain TRP.
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people
argue that print
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media
have the authority to write
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details
about
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celebrities
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personal
life while others
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think
that it should
be controlled
. This essay will
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both views with examples.

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is a source of information for the common
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man and
they
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get
to know about the various scams with the
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help
of the
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media
. There are
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many
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people
in the society who do unethical works and take money in term of bribery. If there is no
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media
, then common
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man
would not be able to know about such scams. To illustrate with examples,
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Yadav
a politician in Bihar state of India,
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get
questioned multiple times by the
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media
for a scam and later
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get
caught by the Police.

On the flip side,
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Media
also
should not
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publish
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celebrities
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personal
photos or stories which they do not want to
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publish
.
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, It has been
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seen
that
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media
tend to publicize the
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celebrity
marriage or their newborn child photo to
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get
TRP which is completely
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wrong
.
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Media
should
be controlled
for such kind of
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events
.
For example
,
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Deepika
and
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Ranveer
,
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famous
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celebrities
in India, want to
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keep
their marriage
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personal
and do not want any
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media
to
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publish
stories or photos.

To conclude
,
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Media
is a vital tool for getting information from
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different
cities, states and countries and should continue to
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publish
useful articles which can
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help
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people
to
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get
familiarize about something.
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But
they should not
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publish
anyone's
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personal
photos
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just
to gain TRP.
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IELTS essay ome people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people's private life while other's think it should be controlled? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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