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Some people think that the media newspapers have the right to publish details of people s private life while other s think it should be controlled Discuss both views v.2

Some people think that the media newspapers have the right to publish details of people s private life while other s think it should be controlled 2
Media is increasingly interfering in private life of people’s. Many people think that they have the right to make public personal life of people while some feel that it should be limited. This essay will discuss both viewpoints of this controversial issue. There are a growing number of people’s who think that it is acceptable if media (newspapers) publish things about people’s life. They believe that their life is owned by the media and they are obliged to tell every detail of their personal life to them. Moreover, they think that it is the media who has made people’s life worth to be read by other people. For example, media publishes the detail of each and every aspect of celebrities life whether it is a marriage function or someone’s cremation. Thus, for media getting into details of someone’s life has become a priority. In contrast, there are some people who think that media’s interference should be limited in people’s life. The reason being, everybody has right to privacy which should not be tampered by any means. Furthermore, they feel that if details of someone’s personal life are publicized by media then people judge them. Professors in a university, for instance, claimed that students become conscious if their final project details are leaked before demonstration and ultimately, they try to change it as much as possible to make it perfect. Therefore, media should feel responsible about what to publish about personal lives of people. In conclusion, what to publish and what not to publish has become a heated debate among people all over the world. This essay discussed whether media should publish about people’s personal life or it should be controlled.
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increasingly
interfering in private
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life
of
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people’s
.
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people
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think
that they have the right to
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make
public
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personal
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life
of
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people
while
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some
feel that it should
be limited
. This essay will discuss both viewpoints of this controversial issue.

There are a growing number of
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people’s
who
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think
that it is acceptable if
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media
(newspapers)
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publish
things about
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people’s
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life
. They believe that their
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life
is
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owned
by the
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media and
they
are obliged
to
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tell
every
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detail
of their
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personal
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life
to them.
Moreover
, they
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think
that it is the
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media
who
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has
made
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people’s
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life
worth to
be read
by other
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people
.
For example
,
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media
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publishes
the
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detail
of each and every aspect of celebrities
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life
whether it is a marriage function or someone’s cremation.
Thus
, for
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media
getting into
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details
of someone’s
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life
has become a priority.

In contrast
, there are
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some
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people
who
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think
that
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media’s
interference should
be limited
in
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people’s
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life
. The reason being, everybody has right to privacy which should not
be tampered
by any means.
Furthermore
, they feel that if
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details
of someone’s
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personal
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life
are publicized
by
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media
then
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people
judge them. Professors in a university,
for instance
, claimed that students become conscious if their final project
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details
are leaked
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before
demonstration and
ultimately
, they try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
it as much as possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it perfect.
Therefore
,
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media
should feel responsible about what to
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publish
about
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personal
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lives
of
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people
.

In conclusion
, what to
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publish
and what not to
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publish
has become a heated debate among
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people
all over the world. This essay discussed whether
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media
should
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publish
about
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people’s
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personal
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life
or it should
be controlled
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the media newspapers have the right to publish details of people s private life while other s think it should be controlled 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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