People have different views about/ as to the primary goal of schools. While I agree that schools can transform children into useful members of society, I believe that they also bring benefits to students themselves.
On the one hand, turning children into useful citizens is the main purpose of schools. The primary reason is that the same core subjects such as math, literature and civic education are present in the curriculum of most schools. Children, therefore, are expected to share the same moral standards, general knowledge and skills. If all members of society were to have such criteria, society would become more stable and civilized as the crime rate would be low. If schools were to fail to equip their students with needed skills or standards, they would not become productive members of society. Thus, it is understandable why schools’ main responsibility is to producing good members of society.
On the other hand, it can argued that children themselves can reap of number of benefits. When children are taught a wide range of subjects, they can have the opportunity to become more well-rounded and widen their outlook on life. This would help them to be able to adapt to a new environment in their later life. Another benefit would be that schools are a perfect environment for students to develop their communication skill. This is largely because they are enabled to make friends with their classmates and talk to them virtually on a daily basis. This skill is considered / arguably highly beneficial for social life of children.
In conclusion, it is my view that schools not only produce good citizens for society but also bring benefits for each individual student.
People
have
different
views about/ as to the primary goal of
schools
. While I
agree
that
schools
can transform
children
into useful
members
of
society
, I believe that they
also
bring
benefits
to
students
themselves.
On the one hand, turning
children
into useful citizens is the main purpose of
schools
. The primary reason is that the same core subjects such as math, literature and civic education are present in the curriculum of most
schools
.
Children
,
therefore
, are
expected
to share the same moral standards, general knowledge and
skills
. If all
members
of
society
were to have such criteria,
society
would become more stable and civilized as the crime rate would be low. If
schools
were to fail to equip their
students
with needed
skills
or standards, they would not become productive
members
of
society
.
Thus
, it is understandable why
schools’
main responsibility is
to producing
good
members
of society.
On the other hand
, it can
argued
that
children
themselves can reap of number of
benefits
. When
children
are taught
a wide range of subjects, they can have the opportunity to become more well-rounded and widen their outlook on life. This would
help
them to be able to adapt to a new environment in their later life. Another
benefit
would be that
schools
are a perfect environment for
students
to develop their communication
skill
. This is
largely
because
they
are enabled
to
make
friends with their classmates and talk to them
virtually
on a daily basis. This
skill
is considered
/
arguably
highly
beneficial for social life of children.
In conclusion
, it is my view that
schools
not
only
produce
good
citizens for
society
but
also
bring
benefits
for each individual
student
.
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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