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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 1
Climate change is the greatest threat to the existence of life on earth. Some people, however, argue that instead of preventing it we should find a way to live with it. I completely disagree with this opinion, because I believe that we still have time to tackle this issue and reduce our impact on the climate of earth. Global warming is the main cause of climate change. If both the people and the governments take appropriate actions, this can be controlled to a great extent. For example, the governments should stop the generation of power from fossil fuels which cause more carbon emissions and increase global warming. Governments can also invest in green energy sources like wind, solar and hydropower. Another practical solution that the government can implement is to impose ‘green taxes’ on industries and vehicles which emit carbon. Individuals should also try to reduce their carbon footprint by limiting the use of private vehicles and consuming energy responsibly. Trying to live with climate change instead of preventing it is a dangerous idea because in the near future, climate change will make our planet inhabitable. Because of global warming polar ice is melting causing sea levels to rise. When the sea levels rise coastal cities will get submerged in water. Let us not forget the fact that almost all major cities in the world are extremely close to seas and oceans. Climate change also leads to various natural calamities like cyclones, flooding and drought. To conclude, when there are so many ways to prevent climate change, I cannot agree with the argument that we should find a way to live with it. Climate change is threatening our very existence on this planet and it is high time we did something to tackle this alarming issue
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Climate
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change
is the greatest threat to the existence of life on earth.
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Some
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people
,
however
, argue that
instead
of preventing it we should find a way to
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live
with it. I completely disagree with this opinion,
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because
I believe that we
still
have time to tackle this issue and
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reduce
our impact on the
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climate
of earth.

Global warming is the main cause of
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climate
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change
. If both the
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people
and the
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governments
take appropriate actions, this can
be controlled
to a great extent.
For example
, the
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governments
should
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stop
the generation of power from fossil fuels which cause more carbon emissions and increase global warming.
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Governments
can
also
invest in green energy sources like wind, solar and hydropower. Another practical solution that the
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government
can implement is to impose ‘green taxes’ on industries and vehicles which emit carbon. Individuals should
also
try to
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reduce
their carbon footprint by limiting the
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use
of private vehicles and consuming energy
responsibly
.

Trying to
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live
with
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climate
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change
instead
of preventing it is a
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dangerous
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idea
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because
in the near future,
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climate
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change
will
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make
our planet inhabitable.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of global warming polar ice is melting causing sea levels to rise.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
the sea levels rise coastal cities will
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get
submerged in water.
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Let
us not forget the fact that almost all major cities in the world are
extremely
close to seas and oceans.
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Climate
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change
also
leads to various natural calamities like cyclones, flooding and drought.

To conclude
, when there are
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so
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many
ways to
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prevent
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climate
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change
, I cannot
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agree
with the argument that we should find a way to
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live
with it.
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Climate
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change
is threatening our
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very
existence on this planet and it is high time we did something to tackle this alarming
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issue
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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