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Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals. v. 1
These days, some people think that it is necessary to make an extra payment for unhealthy meals. They believe that it would induce others to start purchasing of nutritious food. I disagree with this idea and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples. Firstly, the consumption of healthy products is significantly expensive. For example, crackers on the counter with low-calories and nutritional meals are 15-20% higher in price than usual bread. Therefore, the vast cost of some beneficial products evokes the necessity to buy cheaper alternatives, which is unhealthy in most of the cases. I assume that the prices of good meals likely to be decreased to make an acquisition of good food affordable for everyone. Another reason why I disagree is the lack of the free time for cooking dishes at home. What I mean by this that there is a plentiful variety of fast-food restaurants that provide “take away” service or delivery comparing to healthy ones. For instance, in my city, there are only two venues with preparing of good meals. As a result, this often leads to usage the amenities of unhealthy cafes. To keep it manageable, restaurants should vary its menus by producing a larger assortment of the nutritional dishes. In conclusion, the ability to consume healthy meals now is limited for some people. Personally, I think that the best way to engender people to eat more nutritious foods is the establishment of new price policies for it and the creations of more restaurants with healthy dishes.
These days,
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people
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think
that it is necessary to
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make
an extra payment for unhealthy
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meals
. They believe that it would induce others to
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start
purchasing of nutritious food. I disagree with this
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idea
and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.

Firstly
, the consumption of
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healthy
products is
significantly
expensive.
For example
, crackers on the counter with low-calories and nutritional
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meals
are 15-20% higher in price than usual bread.
Therefore
, the vast cost of
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some
beneficial products evokes the necessity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
cheaper alternatives, which is unhealthy in most of the cases. I assume that the prices of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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meals
likely to
be decreased
to
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make
an acquisition of
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good
food affordable for everyone.

Another reason why I disagree is the lack of the free time for cooking dishes at home. What I mean by this that there is a plentiful variety of
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fast
-food restaurants that provide “take away” service or delivery comparing to
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healthy
ones.
For instance
, in my city, there are
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only
two venues with preparing of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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meals
.
As a result
, this
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often
leads to usage the amenities of unhealthy
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cafes
. To
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keep
it manageable, restaurants should vary its menus by producing a larger assortment of the nutritional dishes.

In conclusion
, the ability to consume
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healthy
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meals
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now
is limited
for
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some
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people
.
Personally
, I
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think
that the best way to engender
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people
to eat more nutritious foods is the establishment of new price policies for it and the creations of more restaurants with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
dishes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy food to encourage people to begin to eat more healthy meals. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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